AdamBH

Thanks guys for the format advice, in fact this is how it was supposed to be it's just the YWS thing that changed it! But here is the poem in ...

darn it did away with the indents. Don't worry! They are still there in the draft haha. I only changed a few words :)

NEXT DRAFT Seeds I would have sought a way, just like I always do, to sew your love into my heart, without this pretence, this pursue of might beyond my ...

Thank you for your review, actually this poem is not exactly about Anne Frank only, it's about the parallel between Anne Frank and the man on the pavement, who'se voice ...

hey thanks for these new reviews but actually I'm working on a different novel now and yeah so thank you anyway, I might post my new novel here too idk ...

Thank you :D I actually intended that the poem would be about regret in general of everyone, but now that you say it I am actually just going through a ...

Hiya thanks for the good reviews! @Devan, I see what you mean with the choppy, but see I don't usually pause at line breaks at all I just use them ...

Hi there :). Thank you for the review ^^. The 'alack' is actually there to fill the iambic pentameter and it sort of provides a jarring break between 'love' and ...

Love it! I love how it shows how opposites can attract. I think so many people don't get that. Wonderful job!

DID YOU ALL READ THE PROLOGUE FIRST?????? And also, sorry about the pragaraphing. I did paragraph it in my word document but it was only by indenting, so it didn't ...

I love the message of this poem but I agree with LastPaladin. I think you should completely rewrite this and add loads of figurative themes and stuff like that. Make ...

I like this one a lot. I don't have any direct criticism, only I would have liked to hear a bit more detail. Why are you falling for her? Etc. ...

Thank you everyone for he reviews! So, this is my explanation about the background of the poem. It's about how there are so many females who hate men in this ...

Thank youuuuuuu :D The last stanza, force me to eat your throbbing body is like rape me in a twisted canniballistic way, and lets digest each other forever is like ...

Thank you for that wondeful review! I will change 'glowy' to 'glowing'. The Tee-hee, the tongue in cheek sexual metaphor and the last line of the whole thing are there ...