Abigail_W.

Hi there Angelheart! First, I can't even describe how strong you are to go through and write this. The imagery was very vivid, and I definitely got a feel for ...

Hi there! Well, this is one interesting poem, I'll grant you that. I have the feeling that it could turn into something fabulous, but it might need a little work. ...

Hey there! I'll start off by going through and editing some things in red. You can only put down a class for so long until they rise up from ben ...

Hey there! How are you? I like this poem very much, but I think you may have to work on the enjambment a little bit. I'll go through and edit ...

Hi Kyladoot! Welcome to YWS! The first thing I have to ask you about this poem is: what was your purpose? Usually, when I'm writing poetry or a short story, ...

Hi Mayendejoe! Welcome to the Young Writers' Society! I'm afraid I have to agree with Mizzle; this isn't exactly a poem. I'm not sure if YWS is the right place ...

Hi BadNarrator! Welcome to YWS! Okay, I'm quite certain that the biggest problem in this piece is the punctuation and overall set-up. It is very hard to tell where on ...

Hey there! I think everyone else just about covered it, but I see one more mistake: the first line is in the present tense, while the rest of the poem ...

Hi Durriedog! Your rhyme scheme is absolutely fabulous! It wasn't too predictable or forced and just seemed to roll off the tongue. Good work! This is written from the point ...

Hi Nike! How's it going? I think I'll start by going through and editing/revising some things in red, not to mention a few comments on the side. My heart couldn't ...

Hi Snickerdooly! I think Snoink mostly covered it, so I'm just going to make a quick list of words you need to correct ... - collects - woman's - distrupts ...

Hi Mimimac! The title drew me in from the first ... My hopes are very simple, A dream rolled into one. Yet fears are more the reality, My dread of ...

Hi BlueAfrica! Okay, honestly, this is confusing, but it's great once you sit down and think about it. I mean, the message is so unique and beautiful, and the whole, ...

Hi KatTrain! I like this, and I definitely think it's cute. I just wrote you this whole long elaborate review, but in my lack of computer sense I managed to ...

Hi Berlynn Rae! This is a nice poem you have here, and some outstanding imagery, but it definitely needs some work. Let's start from the top. "Nothing could be more ...