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Hey Fictionfanatic! I like the idea of this very much! For most of the dead , it doesn't matter , since you end up with the people you loved who ...

Hi Kitrosemon13! What Shepherd said! Two little corrections: :idea: You don't need a space before your question marks. :idea: Your second line should be, "I look formard to a fight." ...

Hi Persephoneia! Excellent poem you have here! First thing: enjambment. I'm not saying it's bad, it's just that I don't get it. I mean, what is the reason for your ...

Oh, my, Blackbird12, I think this is the best short story I have ever read on YWS. It is so tenderly cold; the descriptions are so brutally lush. Oh, my. ...

Hi Emmyloud1995! First things first, I'll edit some things ... As snow dies to a fire , that runs blue, your white gown, pours burning love , on each skull ...

To Lindsay: short stories can be as long as is necessarry to get the point across. Generally, they are under 25,000 words. Anything 25,000 words + would usually be considered ...

Hey there Virsanity! Iceprincess just about summed it up. The main problem with this poem is that you are struggling to rhyme. I could see you writing "We love our ...

Hi 13timmy24! Nice poem you have here! Well, it seems a bit more like a rant than a poem, per se. But whatever. I like your consistent rhyme scheme and ...

Hi Charlie1314! Welcome to the Young Writers' Society; I hope you will get some good reviews here, and do a bit of reviewing yourself, too. Just a hint: due to ...

Hi Mybrokenreality! Welcome to the Young Writers' Society, if I haven't welcomed you already. I like very much the concept of this poem. However, it could get a bit repetitious. ...

Hi Tigs6969! I'll first go through and change a few things in red. The knife it stares at me Hoping to enter her throat The pain and suffering She may ...

Wow, Emmylou1995, this is beautiful! The shock of thy seduction , rages deep within my soul , like a galloping stallion. Mere gazes from your calming eyes , and thy ...

Hi CaptianRandom! First, I'll go through and edit some things in red. Sometimes I wonder what death will be like, Is it everything we want it to be? Or is ...

Hi Persephoneia! This is just gorgeous! You fly on wafts of lilac This is so beautiful and original! Excellent work! And gather rainwater to drink as it’s cried Huh? I ...

Hi Aspiringauthor17! Welcome to the Young Writers' Society; I hope you will get some good reviews here, as well as do a bit of reviewing yourself. Speaking of which, I ...