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Thank you so much :-)

I accidently messed up on one of the quotes in my reply lol. This website uses BBCode so if you ever want to use italics/bold/underlining you can look up how ...

"I moved out the way as she barged in and kicked off her high heels" Moved out OF the way. Where I live, everyone says 'moved out the way' so ...

Thank you for the review :-) I was actually just thinking about how I could develop their meeting scene and make it more realistic/interesting! His eyes quickly darted back and ...

You're welcome. I really enjoyed this chapter, and I will definitely read any upcoming chapters! Evan has such potential to be an amazing protagonist!

I'll be looking forward to it :-)

Honestly, I would say yeah! Because if you are constantly worrying about grammar then your writing is going to suffer as it wont flow due to you constantly thinking of ...

You're not wrong about the grammar rule in general! You've actually explained it to me in a way that now I actually understand it! You're actually completely right, it's just ...

I have just asked a teacher at my college, and she said that the eyelid sentence does make sense - also checked the piece with Grammarly. Adding in the words ...

Thank you so much! Another grammar mistake involving commas. You need to either remove the comma, or put a word like "they" after the word "and" in the second clause. ...

The thing about not being arrested was because this is from her point of view and she's an unreliable narrator. She doesn't explain what happens, as although it's insinuated she ...

Thank you :-)

Oh damn yeah, that [quote] isn't meant to be there and there was another few lines explaining what I liked that seem to have disappeared!

Thank you, again! It means a lot

Thank you so much for the review, and thank you for spotting my typo XD