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" new disastrous tropical storm" was supposed to be all over the place in the example I gave but the words went directly under each other when I submitted, so ...

I'll definitely work on the repitition and describing why she's so fearful! Thanks so much for the advice, I really appreciate it.

Thanks for the review! I'll be sure to work on elaborating on the situation and describing why the girl feels so threatened by the attic. Thanks and actually, I might ...

I apologize, it was accidentally submitted twice.

HolographicLadybug, Your play is very good. There are a few minor thing I would suggest changing. 1.) When you described the characters you described why they were important. It would ...

@LordofLit :) Skyla is not the black hole.....but you are very close. Skyla does have something to do with the black hole though. Thanks so much for your review! I ...

@LordofLit101 Thanks, that really means a lot! I am thrilled you enjoyed it so far and I will try to make it a bit more dramatic! I plan on editing ...

@jumpingsheep I agree with you and plan on editing this. :) Thanks for pointing this out! :)

@Tortwag Thanks a lot for the taking the time to write really good advice! Now, I understand the main problem of my story and how I can fix it. Thanks ...

@Megrim Thanks so much for the review! It is very helpful and I will definitely work on those things! :)