-KayJuran-

Dreamy... Your dad lives in Bongolia? Where's that?! XD Hehe, I'm glad my parents aren't on this site. I'd get embarrassed enough if my friends saw my stuff on here. ...

I don't really know what Daishi are either... I'm assuming they're something like the mechs in Gundam Wing and Full Metal Panic. Hehe, very funny though... I'm noticing a trend ...

A thought to add: I was talking to the clerk at the local bookstore about the books and he said that the reason there are just so damn many is ...

Well, this is an intriguing idea. She's from the Ukraine, and she's moved to the U.S. so of course, she's a little confused. A few things I would point out... ...

He was in the atrium, her roommate later said, surrounded by girls; just more theater majors, I think. You didn’t notice, but when you walked by, he stopped talking to ...

Oh, wow... I wasn't sure what this was going to be about when I first started reading, but.. well, I loved it. I'd better start critiquing now, I guess.. Okay, ...

Um... there is no way I can match Gummy's critique but I'll try to give you a good one all the same. :) First of all... And I as I ...

I'll admit, I did have to read this more than once.. and even then I'm not sure I fully understood it. I like bubble's point though; "you make of it ...

Actually... I’ve seen beyond the rainbow, Its colors black and grey. Its colors? Firsts of all, it should be It's, and second of all, it just doesn't sound good. Might ...

First things first.. research help.. :) Name: Callie McKenzie Age: Sixteen Lives: Birmingham (from Manchester) Height: 167cm Weight: 50 kg – 55 kg (depending on how much ice-cream I’ve eaten ...

Myself, I don't think present participles are necessary. Funny I should say that as I use them a lot, but.. I think that's one of my downfalls. Present participles are ...

First of all, please forgive me if I repeat anything that anyone else has said.. I do agree with Myth in that parts of it do seem a little creepy.. ...

Wow.. hehe, I like it. Not that it makes much sense, but it's funny all the same. :) Only thing I'd say is how it's a spaceship at the beginning, ...

I'd prefer it if the format were different when you posted.. spaces between paragraphs makes it a whole lot easier to read. :wink: I think you definitely have a good ...

Not sure what I think about the repetition of 'dance' - it doesn't really bother me much.. in fact, I'd almost go as far as to say that it adds ...