Critiques By A Username That's Hard To Pronounce

Hey all! My name is Alic, and my store is open!

Please post the following information:

Title:
Genre:
Summary:
Bid (points):

I'll be reviewing the higher bids first, though I'll try to get to all of them.

Genres I will review:
Poetry (all types)
Short stories: Fantasy
Science Fiction
Other
Action-Adventure

Genres I will not review:
Short stories: Romance
Fan-fiction
Historical Fiction
Non-fiction
Scripts

Opening the floor...now!

Hello!
Could you please review the first part of the first chapter of my novel?
That would be awesome! Thanks!

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-ALICE