Jared's Critique Lounge

Just like Conrad Rice, my other critiquing thread got buried, and I want to start critiquing again, now that school is in full swing.

REVIEWING

I will review everything but fantasy. Sorry. Can't stand it. >.< I really enjoy reading Action/Adventure and Other Fiction.

MY CRITIQUES

My critiques contain the pretty basic things, such as grammar edits, character flaws, setting and stuff. Of course, I can go in depth, if you'd like to. I'm going to attach a line-by-line critique to every critique I write up. In that, I can go deeper into the story, commenting a certain sections without filling up your screen with a whole bunch of quote boxes.

PAYMENT

Nothing in particular. Maybe a few points if you really like my critique. As others have done, I'm more likely to critique your story if you have critiqued something of mine.

IN QUEUE

Conrad Rice's Mother


COMPLETED

Conrad Rice's Two Entries for Cal's Contest

XxxDo's Justice & Haunted, II

-Jared

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic37423.html

Could you rip this apart please? They're my last two entries for Cal's contest.

Seeing as you sent me this link through msn, I think you're in need of work ?

^^

okay then, here's my latest story:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic37494.html

It's called Justice.

And, well, if you're really in need of work, there's always this one as well:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35492.html

(The 2nd link is part 2 of a story, but they can be read independantly I reckon.)



Rip apart?

Xxx

Done, Conrad. XxxDo, yours will be posted later tonight!

-Jared

I know you said no fantasy, only you used to, and you did read this, actually, and it's more alternate history than fantasy and I'd really really really appreciate it if you would, so... please?

Scavenger 1.1
Scavenger 1.2

You can say no.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post441837.html#441837

Rip this apart please. I feel like something's missing, and I need to figure out what it is. If you could help me, it would be appreciated.

Alrighty! I've just done Xxxdo's, so now I'm onto Scavenger (it's alright. I'll make an exception for you and anyone else who asks nicely) and then onto Mother. I can't wait!

-Jared

Hey.

Wrote something that might be up your alley.

topic39131.html

Check it out, if you like.

Jared darling!


I have been working on a new story, it's best described as "Dramatic Fiction" but since there is no section for that, I have placed it in Romance.

Since you haven't said anything about not being willing to read romance though, I figure that it would be ok ^.^


Anywhoo here you are.


topic39608.html

topic39694.html

Thankie mucho
OverEasy

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