Hello! A short review because I started to write a comment but then didn't stop typing!
I really enjoyed reading this poem and the concept of an Act II in a poem is so brilliant I don't know how I ever thought about it. It breaks up the poem while continuing the same message/story. I definitely may steal that one day in my personal work. The onomatopoeia used to introduce the first 6 stanzas is a wonderful touch that helped paint the picture. I can picture someone speaking, or perhaps writing, with the noise going on in the background. It wasn't abrasive, in your face, or awkward, and fit perfectly. Additionally, I enjoy the tone and message of the poem. In the first "Act", the narrator is very clearly reminiscing about being older, while Act II juxtaposes this with the narrator writing a letter to themself to be grateful for the things they had in their youth. I find it interesting how in the beginning, they seemed to be speaking to someone, but in the end, they write to themself. This shows growth in the narrator between the childish pride of wanting validation from others to the mature reflectiveness of our inner thoughts. Furthermore, this message is extremely relatable to almost everyone. The title fits the poem perfectly, and I also think it's fitting.
Usually, I will have a critique or two to help give a writer helpful feedback on how to improve, however, I genuinely found myself loving this poem from beginning to end. This is a type of poem to inspire someone to write, from the title to the structure, and the realistic approach used. I definitely need to check out your other work now!
Sincerely, Lullaby ♡
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