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I like, pizza

Pizza is delicious

Because I like pizza

Santa Claus 'slurp'

Boyfriends are overrated

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TheUnnatural
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Nicely written, although I kiiinda don't understand it ;)

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StupidSoup
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How did this get on the front page????

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Poopsie
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hahaha....aha....ahaha....ha.........ahaa.........ah........ha.........haha..........I need a pizza break. Santa is pedobear in disguise.

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veeren
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ten hundred percent yes

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Sylar
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What does "Santa Claus 'slurp'" mean?

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Messenger
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That is true

Hey! SecreteJournalist (aka Brie) here to give you a quick review!

For this poem, I do disagree with Snorlax's review a wee bit. In this format, it doesn't seem to really need punctuation... but that decision is totally up to you! That comma after like is also unnecessary, but I suppose you have the freedom of format. Also, I will agree with one thing Snorlax said, you need to capitalize 'Clause.' Oh, and also, 'Clause' is actually supposed to be spelled 'Claus'. Other than that, there's not much to review regarding concept.

Keep being you! c,:

Sincerely,
SecreteJournalist
AKA
Brie

The deep inner meaning beautify interposes with...
What am I talking about?
PIZZA!

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shiney1
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The heck? What is the purpose? What does this all mean?

And why do I like it?

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Snorlax Review

Hello Snorlax here!
Reveiw time!!!

First off i think this little wacha-ma-call-it is both funny and true, though it is good there are some problems.

First off I'd like to say that in the first line there should not be a comma in the middle it should be at the end. Then in the second line a period at the end is necessary. The third line i thought was confusing along with the fourth and fifth line, witch i thought where both irrelevant. Also the c in Clause should be capitalized Although i did enjoy the last line a lot. XD here is what I think the poem/thing should be like
I like pizza,
Pizza is delicious.
Because i like pizza,
(And if you must keep the next two lines)
Santa Clause 'slurp'.
Boyfriend's are overrated.

I don't know why but i prefer punctuation at the end of poem lines, and grammar. XD

Keep Writing!

-Snorlax



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