Published July 16, 2011
His name is Tim,
he was afraid
of what he thought
was a bad grade.
He got his marks,
he grew a smile.
He told everyone
by his mobile.
He got a good job
from all his marks,
it pays him heaps.
''Well,'' he remarks.
''I studied hard,
night and day.
It was worth it
what can I say!''
Now Tim is rich
with kids and a wife.
He is at home...
having the time of his life!
I was kind of bored so I made a little rhyming poem 
Hope you like it!
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i realy like this poem. Honestly this is my favorite poem of the day!!!!!!!!!!!!
I like the poem. I got to agree it isn't as complex as I thought it would be but then you were bored. Good job
That's an Epic Poem to write when your bored!
Grammar, spelling and punctuation are all good and I do like the carefree and
Simplicitness of that poem!
P.s I think I made the word simplicitness up as it comes up as a red underline underneath the word....
Yes it was meant to say STAY IN SCHOOL. lol...
and I wasn't trying to make this a complex or interesting poem it was more becuase i was bored
I think the title here was intended to be stay in school? Otherwise I don't see how it makes sense.
Your poem was quite sweet and would definitely appeal to a younger audience. It isn't very challenging to read and I'm sure it was nice to write.
Although it's obvious that the rhymes are forced, it would be good as an encouragement for young children in primary schools.
Keep up the good work and watch your capitalisation!