Open Your Eyes

hello there,
I really like this one its short but descriptive and its different but very interesting I like what u did with the poem when u said "(read the bottom from the top)" it was not expected but you really captured my interest so, I can see your point was we take the beautifulness of nature for granted everyday and I think I might appreciate it more after reading this its really clever be proud of your work

-joshua

Hi

This was very short

'Matter, Woods, Trees, Leafs

All For Us To See

But Only Notice All You See

Dark, Grey, Black, Concrete.

(read bottom to top in backwards)'

Ok, you are making a list, for us all to see and then you are comparing the ideas, of nature vs man made. I think this is really clevr. Whichever way around you read it, your point still makes sense. Ineresting.
You do make a good poin, because I think we do get too caugt up in our own lives to appreciate the bauty of nature sometimes.

This is a great observation on the human psyche.

I like the idea, it's original and creative, the formatting and the backwards idea was great (or maybe there was already something like this and I'm just ignorant). But the capital letters in every word doesn't seem necessary (or maybe it's just your style to write like that?). And it kind of-- It doesn't make sense. I get the point of what you're trying to speak out here but, well, it happens. It's also a bit weird when I read it backwards, i'll elaborate it here:

"Concrete, black, grey, dark" << I have no problems with this line, but it'll have an effect to the the last line

"See, you all notice only but" << the word "only" here seems a bit off, but if you loose it when you read it normally it'll also become weird.
"See to us for all" << Also doesn't make sense.

"Leafs, trees, woods, matter" << maybe you should make it in order, like "Matter, wood, leafs trees" But it's also weird. Well it all seems of, honestly. And the fact that the first and last lines should have made a connection between them, like that concrete is man-made and trees are natural, but it doesn't just connect.
(Or maybe I read it wrong, if I did get it wrong then I'm sorry. And please tell me how you would want the readers to read it.)

If I didn't read the description from the front page, maybe it would take a little more time for me to understand this poem. But I love the idea; read it backwards, I would never have thought something like that. Maybe if you practice it a bit you'll get it better.

Hopes this helps,

-Venonymous