The girl in the corner was all alone
She sat and she thought
She thought of times she did not know
Of places she'd like to see
She thought of who she was going to be
She thought of the world of the war
Of the people and the things
She thought till she could think no more
And then only then did she know for sure
That this world our world
Was hers to explore
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hello, i really liked your poem, it was sort, sweet, simple and under complicated, you didnt try use big wprds or metaphors or over complicate the poem and because the peom is meant to be a childs mind that really works well here, overall i really liked it, you clearly have alot of potential as a wrier, well done on your poem ,i really like your writing keep it up.
Hello~
First things first, this poem is short, sweet and seemingly simple, just the way this poem is supposed to be! I picked up the theme of youth, knowledge and discovery, and believe that your message was conveyed well. I saw some punctuation might have been needed, such as in the lines "And then only then" as well as "this world our world". The rhyme scheme worked well and smoothly, although the first lines started off without a rhyme(?).
All in all, this was a delight to read, and sort of inspiring as well. I encourage you to write more!
Hi, wierdbookworm!!
This is Eros here!!
This poem " The girl all alone " is a short, sweet, dramatic, realistic, and a lovely poem. It has a great in - depth meaning. The poem has a very good Idea. It has a lovely meaning. the poem is based on a girl who thinks about her likes and aboyt her future and things like that.
You have a wonderful art of writing poetry. Your writing has won me and my heart. You have got a real talent of writing so wonderful poems. Continue writing such poems and we will continue reading and loving them.....
Hi again!
I have been reviewing a lot huh? I just really like your poems!
Anyway let just make this very quick and all...This poem is amazing. It's like it saying that the girl would experience how reality would looks like. I have to say, its pretty a good one. The rhyming for sure is also good. Because it perfectly makes sense! The format also good. Like I said before it might be short but still it still simply beautiful! That's the true art of poetry! Maybe I might consider writing something like this too? I dont know I would try but it would be really hard to do. So yeah, I would just try.
Anyway as always keep writing and well done as always!
~ILoveBooks123