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these feels are rated e for everyone

by veeren


please listen along here as you read :))

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why do we wait til it’s too long since we’re gone
how am i so caught up im on my own
things never seem to come out how we want
thought i used to know myself but now i dont

i wanna love but it’s t-i-ring me out
only ins-i-de do i know
who’s left to pick me up when it’s all going so wrong
i can’t decide if i want to be here no more

but when the days done and i come to bed here alone
i think to myself is this all there is in my home
thoughts passing by it’s hard to decide they’re all wrong
leave me to voices bottles of poison all gone

i wish i coulda told myself that i need help
and it’s not too late for me
how do i explain to them inside my head
it dont need no company
but look me in my eyes so i feel the butterflies (for a minute)
with the hope you’re givin me
but when i think twice on how everyone lies
i remember why it’s feeling so hard to breathe


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Sun May 28, 2023 5:04 pm
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KaiaJersaga wrote a review...



Well, I do have to say this is quite relatable. I think everyone gets a moment or two (or twenty thousand) when they'd find lines in this relatable.

I think this was probably my favorite line:

i think to myself is this all there is in my home
thoughts passing by it’s hard to decide they’re all wrong
leave me to voices bottles of poison all gone


It just so easily relates the feelings of emptiness and gloominess. And the thoughts that make it "hard to decide [that] they're all wrong" is something very difficult to put into words, but you did it there! Thoughts are often little lying traps. And when you're already feeling a bit down, one lying thought telling you you aren't good enough can really send you down a mountain slide!

Thanks for sharing! This was awesome.

Have a great day and stay positive!
-Kaia




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soundofmind says...



when you said “i wanna love but it’s— *sickest beat drop ever*” i felt that




veeren says...


LMAOOOOooo it needed a lil bouncy bounce



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LuxLuthor says...



this is such a raw piece. seriously made me cry. super awesome, i really don't know what else to say




veeren says...


<33 thank you for taking the time to read/listen



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Monsters says...



It's on a new level :-)




veeren says...


<33



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Spearmint says...



i have listened to this multiple times already and ahh <3 i love your voice and the melody and the lyrics 0.0 (the "t-i-ring me out" and "ins-i-de" sound so nice, and the "things never seem to come out how we want / thought i used to know myself but now i dont" and "but when i think twice on how everyone lies / i remember why it’s feeling so hard to breathe" really resonate.) i hope you keep making music!! ^-^




veeren says...


AHH thank you so much :,) it really means a lot and and im so glad you enjoyed it <33



Spearmint says...


<333




If you want to tell people the truth, make them laugh, otherwise they'll kill you.
— Oscar Wilde