Hey, foxmaster here for a quick review!
Wow. This was good, and I really liked the lyrics to this. It was really impressive, and this made me feel so peaceful, and calm! I was very impressed, and immediately went to all the other reviews to see what everyone else thought of it!
However, it's clear that his needs to be polished a bit. You should definitely capitalize I, because I found myself getting lost in this tangle of no capitalization while I read this.
In addition, you don't add any commas, apostrophes, anything, which can lo make this confusing. (I don't know if it's supposed to be like that, because I have never reviewed lyrics before, so tell me if I'm wrong or not.)
Also, the verses felt really long, and like I said, I was pretty confused.
But, other than that, that's it, and I was impressed.
happy writing,
-Foxmaster
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