Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well we've got ourselves yet another intriguing origin story that once again manages to surprise me with just how unique it manages to me. Its an ending that once again caught me by surprise and I loved it.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Once upon a time,there was a young,ten year old girl named Vanessa,who lived happily with her mother.They were both witches,in fact,they even had their own coven.It should have been like any wholesome Mother and daughter relationships.
Except,it wasn't.Not for long.
The mother fell in love with...a vampire.A vampire who was cursed to be one by witches,therefore,he hated them.
Well that was quite the start there already. I do believe we have run into witches before in these tales so that's not quite the biggest of surprises but the tale of a vampire who hates watches but fell in love with one definitely makes things very intriguing all over again.
But he appeared not to hate witches enough,because he had fallen in love with one.
Still,when she had married him,he asked that she and her daughter rid themselves of their witch powers.
Now,one can't simply "rid themselves of their witch powers" because one is born with it,it can't just "disappear."
The mother eventually got bitten by her husband and became a vampire,like him.She no longer had witch powers.
Ooooh well that's an interesting one. It seems like the request makes sense there, and even if it certainly isn't the greatest of requests the fact that said request was made suggests that this man did in fact love these two enough to at least consider being with them as a proper father and husband. As tragic as it might be that the wife had to give up her powers to become a vampire at least it seems like it could be better.
But Vanessa still did.She wasn't willing to give them up,either.Not even if a stinky man she was supposed to call "her father" told her to.
She got a younger sibling from her two parents.A little boy named Lucifer.The only reason she liked her father's existence was because he gave Lucifer one.Other than that,Vanessa hated the man.
Her Mom wasn't the same,no matter how hard she tried,they could never had the bond that they used to have.
Oooh well that's an interesting perspective to see. From the earlier introduction it looked like the family was struggling a little bit it would survive, but this suggests there was much more animosity with Vanessa not being able to connect with her mother properly anymore and definitely not being close to her stepfather. At least it seems the baby did manage to provide some sort of uniting moint.
One day,her parents walked up to her and said:
"Jump out the window.We don't want you anymore."
Vanessa was shocked.Why would they tell her to do something like that?!
They really didn't want her anymore.She looked at Lucifer,playing with his toys.Could she really?
"Now." They said firmly.
She walked up to her windowsill...
But then,at the last second,she used her powers to stop her fall.Then,she concentrated REALLY hard on making her family forget that she ever existed.
"It's better this way." She said to herself.
For the thirteen year old now lived by her own rules.
Ooooh another move I did not anticipate in the slightest there. For starters it looks like the parents really took some rather dangerous turns, I'm assuming mostly because of the father given we know the mother was once upon a time very attached to her daughter, and so they decided to kick poor Vanessa out but she seems to have used the powers she had remaining to fake her death and live her own life. Its a sad place to end but at least it seems Vanessa is still alive and maybe she can at least reunite with her brother someday even if her mother seems lost to her now.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, this was another lovely story to read. I think you did a pretty wonderful job there in terms of developing Vanessa there and showing how she lost her mother even though she was still alive and what drove her to preserve her powers and then use those to forge a new life for herself despite everything. Its a powerful little tale and the ending is just as hopeful as it is tragic.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.