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Morrigan tried to claw her way out of the flesh prison that was December. All too fast, her soul was sucked into his body. She was looking at the world through his eyes, his own body compressing against her spirit.
“Don’t you remember? Inclementia, don’t you remember when we fell in love?” December’s voice echoed in all around her, twisting and turning through her brain like a ribbon going through holes. Smooth, yet disorienting.
Again. That name. Inclementia. Why did he keep calling her that? That wasn’t her name. That wasn’t…
“Don’t you remember the snow? King Yukio? The flowers I gave you?” He asked.
Snow…snow…flashes of the vast, twisting woods flickered in her mind, the woods covered in white snow. Animals leaped and bounded, free to be, as well as…
As well as faeries. Wingless faeries, faeries that were the size of humans, faeries that could float, faeries that could love…
One faerie, a boy, with piercing white eyes and a silky blue nightgown, reaching his bone claws out to her. Soft and jagged, desperate to show her what was good.
Still desperate, even as the years went on. Even as Inclementia was reincarnated as Morrigan.
Morrigan could feel his sadness, his misery, mixing within her. Of course she did. He killed her body and sucked in her soul. They were one and the same.
All he ever wanted was to be with her. To never let her go.
What would Fawn think? Her parents? No one would know what became of her, what had happened to her.
“I’ve missed you so much. You have no idea. As soon as I saw the light in your eyes, I knew that you were my love.” December gushed.
Oh, but he missed her! His heart was broken, his soul was shattered! She could feel his tears wanting to slip out of his eyes, but then, he blinked them back.
Morrigan was torn. One part of her wanted to escape from his body and run back to her family, to her life, even if they couldn’t see her.
Even if she was dead.
Another part of her wanted to stay within December and watch him as he killed, giving him words of comfort and letting him know that he wasn’t alone in the strange, new modern world.
But did Morrigan really have a choice? She couldn’t escape him. He wouldn’t allow it. She was forever ingrained in his body, he was her home.
Morrigan took soft, slow breaths. There wasn’t anything to worry about. December did it out of love. He loved her. He wasn’t going to hurt her. Deep down, a part of her loved him for how he cared, for he wanted to protect her.
Besides, his body had become hers. She might as well get used to living within him.
“I love you.” Morrigan said, giving him a kiss on the cheek.
She wondered what it felt like to him on the other side.
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Another enjoyable short story from you! Overall, it was intriguing, as always a little more description would benefit the piece but I enjoyed learning more about their stories.
This is terrifying. The term 'flesh prison' made my skin crawl and at first I didn't remember December was a character and was so confused thinking, omg what the hell is a flesh prison?? but then I remembered and somehow it's still just as horrifying.
This kind of made me think the story was perhaps a bit of a metaphor for controlling or toxic relationships, since December is so possessive of Morrigan/Inclementia that he quite literally consumes her. I'm not sure if that was intended, but it really adds to the story.
[/quote] Morrigan took soft, slow breaths. There wasn’t anything to worry about. December did it out of love. He loved her. He wasn’t going to hurt her. Deep down, a part of her loved him for how he cared, for he wanted to protect her. [/quote]
Poor Morrigan, this was really sad to read. She seems to be justifying it to herself when she didn't even get a choice.
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I%u2019m so glad that you liked reading this. Here are some other works that connect to this:
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Hello there friend! In honor of this wintertime review day, team Holly Berries is here to leave you a specially seasonal review!
The Bright Evergreen Bush
First impressions:
I love how whimsical yet deep this story instantly felt and how it left the potential for being dark. However, I found it perfectly balanced with the dark and light between the descriptions and the memories! It was a wonderful piece to read!
Prickly Leaves
places to improve:
I feel like there certainly could have been a bit more description to really draw me into the scenery and feel what Morrigan is feeling. While you did do well with this in a couple of scenes, I think more of this would definitely be useful and contribute greatly to the scenes.
Shiny Red Berries:
places you did well:
I really love how you left it with a slight air of mystery and gothic appeal with the description and memories morrigan has. The emotions as well really help complete the piece and explaining the history behind it helps me understand the piece despite not having read anything of the story previously!
Adding it to the Wreath:
Overall takeaways and final impressions:
Overall, this was an amazing piece! I don’t think any higher rating is necessary for it because even though it has a gothic feel to it, it doesn’t have anything that tells me it needs a higher rating! You did really well in combining the dark and the light in a perfect literary balance and I would love to read more of it in the future!
Brought to you by team Holly Berries!
So glad you enjoyed!