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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: This was quite the little tale here. I think a very interesting relationship between the two of them and that clear even amongst the horrors present was quite a nice tale.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Miles Degrassi joined hands with his twin sister, Elaine Degrassi, as he hung from the wooden bar.
They were trapeze performers at fifteen, in the local circus. The crowd roared and screamed with inhuman excitement at everything they did. It was insane, how hungry they were for a show.
Miles could deal with it, though. It happened ever since they were little. Ever since their parents wanted them to be something. Everyone watched and judged, but that was life. He didn’t think about it too much, because he knew that there was a better life waiting for him. Opportunities were raised as one got older.
Hmm well another little circus situation it seems, and this time a rather different vibe. Loving the start already, once again just telling us a decent bit about both of them as people and their situation in life just from that one starting sentence.
But Elaine…Elaine’s heart was far too big, far too full. If the acrobatics coach screeched at her for not landing perfectly, for not having any balance, her brown eyes would fill to the brim with tears and she would shake with sadness and shame.
It wasn’t just the coach, either. It was their parents. One flaw and they both deemed “unfocused brats”.
Miles knew that neither knew what they were talking about, that they were just pitiful adults, but Elaine cared. She wanted to make them proud. She wanted to get it all right.
Oooh this is a nice little duality. And I also love the fact that we have the brother actually acknowledging the fact that its harder for the sister to understand the real truth there and is trying to accommodate that. We love to see a healthy relationship like that.
He tried telling her not to worry about them, that their opinions were worthless. She nodded and smiled softly, but still cried at their words.
He spoke up for her, yelled at them for her. Why did they have to be such monsters? Why did they have to drive someone to sobs? Didn’t they know the kind of person she was? Didn’t they pay attention? If they had to say such awful things, why didn’t they say it to him? Why did Elaine have to hear their sharp-tongued, heartless insults?
No matter. He would help her grow. He would help her see the truth. He would help her see that life was so much more than pain and fear.
Well it seems we certainly have quite a lot of noble intensions on the mind at the moment, at least as far as the goals of the brother are concerned. You could never quite tell if its going to pay off of course, but at the very least this relationship appears wholesome.
“Miles!” Elaine cried out, slipping from his grasp. Her eyes were wide with pure terror. She sounded faraway, like she was trapped in her mind.
Miles jumped from the wooden, ignoring the boos of the starving, greedy crowd. Elaine was falling to the cement floor, arms and legs flailing helplessly.
All I need to do is hold her. I’ll break her fall. I’ll protect her. Miles thought.
“Don’t panic! I’m coming!” Miles said.
But the ground wasn’t a ground. It was a dark, black mass of shadows, with a pale woman’s face lingering in the middle, mouth open in anticipation.
Oh dear, well here it comes. I just love how the moment I get lulled into the tiniest sense of security everything immediately just falls apart and turns into unadulterated chaos. It definitely gives us quite the vibe here and well I do love these twists.
There was nowhere to run, nothing to do. The crowd did nothing. It was as though they saw nothing, knew nothing of what waited below. But how? How were they not aware? They were a group of people, with such knowledge in them. Weren’t they supposed to help?
He tried to grab Elaine, but she fell right into the mass, into the waiting, toothed mouth, her high screams still piercing the air.
Miles was going to join her into the demonic, nightmare mouth.
Well at least that's a somewhat hopeful note to end on. Yes things are headed towards a sad demonic existence there but at the very least they'll be together because our wonderful brother here seems to be very determined to keep her safe even through whatever this horror happens to be.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall a pretty powerful piece, it did go off the rails a little predictably but I love that we maintain the love and care all throughout really showcasing the power of this relationship.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Kate
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