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Emily’s origin story-The second sister

by vampricone6783


*Another origin story from my story:”Eloise-The demented doll woman.” I have pictures of her in Gacha Club  on my wall.Enjoy!



In the 1960s,there was a wealthy,young witch named Emily Blake.

Emily Blake was the second oldest out of four sisters.

The oldest was Lyra,the third oldest was Eloise,the fourth oldest was Ariana and the youngest was Sarah.

Emily's parents grew old and died.When they died,they were left with gifts from their parents.

Emily was left with the family journals.

Now,Ariana was left with the family heirlooms and she started a museum showcasing their heirlooms.

Emily would do no such thing.

Emily would keep the journals safe,locked away,and would write in her will that after she died,the only person who could open them would be the last living Blake in the family.

If there were no more Blakes left to open the safe she locked the journals in,then..then no one would know their family history.It was that simple.

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The older sister,Lyra,had told them to all visit and help Eloise with their boutique.

Emily disagreed,because Eloise was an adult and could make her own decisions.Lyra shouldn't make them for her.

Emily told this to Lyra,too.

But Lyra respectfully disagreed with her,telling Emily that it was what any good sister would do.

Emily could have just let the other sisters to help Eloise,but Lyra threatened to rid her of her house and money if she didn't help,so Emily reluctantly agreed.

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Emily didn't like working for Eloise,whether she was her sister or not.Eloise was perfectly capable and confident enough to run the shop on her own.

There was also something wrong with Eloise,too.Sarah mentioned it to Emily.Everyone else laughed at her,but Emily didn't.

She watched Eloise carefully,taking note of how she looked at children.

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One night,Emily and her sisters were getting ready to go to a Halloween event and they wanted Eloise to go with them.

They didn't know where she was,so they decided to look in Eloise's boutique,the last place she was in.

They couldn't find her at the boutique,but Leona was there to help them,so that was a big plus.

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They finally found Eloise,in the backroom,murdering a child.

There was only one thing to do to stop her.

Kill Eloise and stop her from hurting others.

They used their witch powers to crush the bookcase on Eloise's head.

It was that simple.



Simple,even when they used to prank adults together and laughed about it later.

Because those times were gone.

Because they were all changed.

That’s what happens when one grows up.

Emily as an angel in Gacha Club:


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Thu Dec 16, 2021 4:43 pm
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Hey! Forever here with a review!

I haven't read the other stories, so my review will be completely based on this chapter. Anyway, to the review now. I think there were a few parts where there were confusion but that can be due to the fact that I have not read the previous ones.

Okay now with the characterisation. Emily appeared to be a neat person to me in thw beginning but as time passed, especially in the end she appeared to be a bit rough when she and her sisters planned to kill Emily. Honestly speaking, no offence but sometimes I think you should have some reason for killing people. Like in this story, I didn't find the slightest reason why Eloise was going to kill the child and also, I think there can be thousand alternatives of killing Eloise to stop her from murdering the child. Sometimes, it doesn't appear to be practical. Was it because that they are witch and don't mind killing? I am way too unsure about this but going with the very very typical explanation of witch, I theorise that. There are enough evidences, even in this particular story to prove me wrong though. I was really surprised by why they didnt take killing as a serious issue, that was pretty much very normal to them. I wonder a lot about the reason, it's always good to provide reasons.

Anyway, I think you managed to develop some good personality from Emily's side. She seems to be an overall good person if we don't take into consideration how she decided to kill Emily. I liked how she wanted Eloise to be self-dependent and not dependent on others. The other sisters were, maybe trying to put their own hands into hee boutique and inculcate their own idea into Eloise's boutique. At least this is what Emily thinks... Maybe the case can be like they were simply trying to help her. We can get a better view if a very slight reaction of Eloise is involved in this story. That can be helpful to the readers.

Now finally with the journals. It's actually interesting why Emily made that will and why she didn't want others to know their family history. Maybe something is wrong, who knows. Overall, I enjoyed reading it as always.

Keep Writing!!

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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: Okayy soo Emily starts out sounding like perhaps the best of the sisters upto this point but that ending...ahhh that just seems so cold and calculated, it completely changes the initial impression I had on Emily.

Anyway let's get right to it,

Once upon a time,in the 1960s,there was a wealthy,young witch woman named Emily Blake.

Emily Blake was the second oldest out of four sisters.

The oldest was Lyra,the third oldest was Eloise,the fourth oldest was Ariana and the youngest was Sarah.

Emily's parents grew old and died.When they died,they were left with gifts from their parents.

Emily was left with the family journals.

Now,Ariana was left with the family family heirlooms and she started a museum showcasing their heirlooms.

Emily would do no such thing.


Okay...so this is just the standard opening that we already know about. I do like how there's a little more information here. It seems Lyra didn't quite know exactly what he siblings did with everything knows a little bit more.

Emily would keep the journals safe,locked away,and would write in her will that after she died,the only person who could open them would be the last living Blake in the family.

If there were no more Blakes left to open the safe she locked the journals in,then..then no one would know their family history.It was that simple.


That's a pretty cool thing there to do for your family. It doesn't seem like these journals do anything particularly interesting as far as the story is concerned, but I think its a fun little moment to safeguard this family and its history.

The older sister,Lyra,had told them to all visit and help Eloise with their boutique.

Emily disagreed,because Eloise was an adult and could make her own decisions.Lyra shouldn't make them for her.

Emily told this to Lyra,too.

But Lyra respectfully disagreed with her,telling Emily that it was what any good sister would do.

Emily could have just let the other sisters to help Eloise,but Lyra threatened to rid her of her house and money if she didn't help,so Emily reluctantly agreed.


Oooh I feel like we were never told of Lyra doing any threatening although I could be misremembering here. That certainly introduces a slightly different air there, its one thing for the sisters to be helping out but for some of them to be forced into helping out, well that makes things a little different for the scenes to come.

Emily didn't like working for Eloise,whether she was her sister or not.Eloise was perfectly capable and confident enough to run the shop on her own.

There was also something wrong with Eloise,too.Sarah mentioned it to Emily.Everyone else laughed at her,but Emily didn't.

She watched Eloise carefully,taking note of how she looked at children.


Hmm, well, I suppose she knew something horrible was going to happen well in advance then if she was the only one that would take actual note of Sarah. It seems like perhaps she is the best of all the sisters then.

One night,Emily and her sisters were getting ready to go to a Halloween event and they wanted Eloise to go with them.

They didn't know where she was,so they decided to look in Eloise's boutique,the last place she was in.

They couldn't find her at the boutique,but Leona was there to help them,so that was a big plus.


Well...there's the whole cast right there just about to walk in Eloise committing that horrible act...oh dear, I guess none of the sisters even if they realized something was wrong with Eloise actually acted on it till it was far too late.

They finally found Eloise,in the backroom,murdering a child.

There was only one thing to do to stop her.

Kill Eloise and stop her from hurting others.

They used their witch powers to crush the bookcase on Eloise's head.

It was that simple.


Well...I don't think killing your own sister no matter what horrors she is committing would ever be the only option or something quite so simple. Even if there wasn't much in the way of emotion in the last one, Lyra still seemed to have some regret while doing this. Emily seems to be rather cold in this moment. That's a little suspicious to me.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall, I think this is a solid piece here. I'd just maybe reconsider the end and slip in a little bit more emotion there. Right now this is very cold and considering from that last picture with the angel it seems she isn't that evil of a person. I think you could perhaps at least show a little more about something that could make Emily come to this kind of mood with Eloise before we get to such a lack of emotion in this decision to kill here.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

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Harry




vampricone6783 says...


The reason Emily is an angel is because Heaven in this universe looks at what you did in life.The only %u201Cbad thing%u201C Emily did was kill her sister,Eloise.

Other than that,she was able to make the cut.




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