Dear @kai.ezra,
I can relate to what you are going through right now. I hope you feel better soon. This is a very good poem, but I would like to point out something that I noticed, if that's okay with you.
I would like to inform you that your poem doesn't really have a layout. It's very important to divide your poem into sections or, as your fellow poets call them, stanzas. If you don't know what they are, they are the paragraph or verse of a poem. Stanzas help the reader understand what is happening, or what message the poet is trying say. Organizing your poetry can help you to write it as well.
How I taught myself to section off my poetry into stanzas is how I taught myself to section off my stories onto paragraphs. Assign each stanza to a topic.
For example, the first paragraph of my review is the introduction. The second paragraph is about stanzas. The third paragraph is mainly about organizing the text. Finally, this paragraph is an example on how I organize MY text.
I hope this review helped you progress as a poet and as a writer in general. I can't wait until you post again, and if you need any help with your poetry, I would be more than happy to help. Until next time!
-@SuperOriginalName
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