Hey there! Care for a review?
For some reason I'm a huge fan of the construction of raps, though I don't enjoy listening to rap myself. I always think they're so interesting with just the unique flow they have- and of course how rappers manage to say things so fast and in that sort of singing but not-singing way that they do. It's bizarre!
They just don’t know what I go through.
They think I’m happy
This part, I think what's trying to be said is that people don't know what the narrator goes through. I found this a little confusing at first because just above these lines, it using "they" to refer to voices in the narrator's head. The only indication we get that it's switching from talking about voices, to talking about people, is that there's a period- the sentence is ended. But still, there needs to be mention of who "they" are if there's going to be a switch in who's being talked about. I also of course could have just misunderstood this and it's actually still talking about the voices, but I thought I'd let you know just in case.
And keep my prayers long and nice.
I don't know why, but I really like this line. There's something so sweet about it- like, I don't know, the thought of prayers that are longer and more "appealing" to the creator seems kinda sweet to me? Maybe that's just because I feel like prayers- both short and long, whether they're beautifully phrased, or mumbled in haste-- I don't think it means a difference! But that's just my opinion. In any case, this line made me think and got a reaction out of me and I liked it. I also at the same time found it a bit sad though, because obviously this person is feeling incredibly troubled- and trying the best he/she/they can to get things better.
That I just want to be free from the crisis.
I felt like some of the flow for this rap, wasn't as strong as it could be. And I even tested it by trying to sort of rap my way through it!
I think a big part of this was that the line lengths weren't very consistent. Variation in length of lines can be perfectly normal and good- but they sort of have to either be in a pattern, or something along those lines, because otherwise certain lines won't have the same number of beats throughout the song, and that can be an issue musically. My advice is to read this out loud to yourself, even rap it, and that should help you get an idea for what I'm talking about, and what needs to be done to make things run together a little smoother. In any case, I hope this helps! Keep it up! c:
-Holysocks
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