Thanks for sharing. I like the indirect way that the poem demands a deep delving into its nuances in order to understand it. For example, the key to understanding the introduction is provided by the reference to a her. Only then can we understand what is meant by the cowering in the face of his dreams.
If he has dreams of her and his heart impels him, then the speaker would want him to cower instead of plowing brazenly ahead. Since he doesn’t cower, then the speaker knows that her hopes of reaching him are useless. She covers her eyes but could still hear him speaking to her.
The rest of the poem seems to be a recollection of memories that are triggered by visual images and sounds. The statement the she is not letting him hear her voice seems to indicate theat the relationship is no longer in effect and that thetee s a very significant distance now, In short that the he mentioned earlier has won.
Suggestions:
If I were to let you[?]
[“]If the world could not see me I wouldn’t even stay.[”]
your heart, [cliche’]
they were not shooting
[Made me wonder why the speaker believes that stars shoot. and that lack of shooting means they are burnt out. The word [shooting] might be seen as subliminal imagery which suggests a desire to shoot the offending person.]
And dear [God,] why can’t I say what I mean?
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