Young Writers Society

Wow, I think that you really did what you wanted to, expressing how you see everything. I felt like I was you and like I had known you for quite some time. I think this flowed wonderfully and is very understandable. The reason that you wrote this is also what is meant to be done, to express something, and I understand how you think that creativeness is really the only way to do it. Personally I don't find myself as being the person or getting lost in exactly what they see, instead I find myself absorbed in trying to understand them. I wonder what their life is like instead of finding myself knowing what it is like. I guess in a sense I am the exact opposite of you, asking instead of knowing and experiencing. I really liked this piece.

Wow, that was pretty amazing...for this time, I'm not going to point out issues with writing which I don't think showed themselves to me. I liked your view of the world which is somehow I see it, beautiful world with so many wonders beholding for the onlookers, only we are so busy with out lives, that we don't stop and observe it as you just described.

Life is not just to be busy and working, it should be lived and observed, to know about its glory, beauty.

Loved what you wrote..keep up the good work!