I really like the ideas and themes behind this poem and how they discuss how the higher you get on your metaphorical "throne", the more you must be willing to sacrifice to earn your place. I also like how the person within their room is contemplating their choices in life and how there are different places of the monarchy in society and in life. But there are some criticisms I have for this poem. I feel like this poem doesn't really have a flow to it but more of someone just talking to themselves, unless this a free verse poem where you don't really have to have too much of a flow or follow rules this poem feels broken. Also, I think you should try to experiment with more unique and less-used words to make your poem sound more powerful, emotional, mature, and overall more well-written. I recommend to go back and edit this since when I did that with a writing piece I had a few months back recently I ended up greatly improving it and making it much higher quality.
Points: 30
Reviews: 52
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