Hey tammy! I thought I'd drop by and review this today.
Funnily enough, we've been studying travel writing in English class, so hopefully I can be of some help.
The thing with travel writing and writing about yourself in general is that your life is way more detailed and complicated than could ever be fully shown in any travel piece, and of course it doesn't really have a theme. So good travel writers have to deliberately pick and choose anecdotes to construct a theme. That's the artificial part of travel writing - you choose what you show to the audience and what theme you're building around.
Right now, I can think of a couple of interesting themes from what you have here. The main one is a theme of memory and how we forget details over time, but then others are burned into your memory. I think you could take that and run with it. Create the world you remember in the reader's head - and then draw attention to the gaps, to the places where your memory has slipped.
But overall, format this more like a story. The best travel writing is written like a short story or a novel, but with generally less dialogue. It's not a list of the places you saw and the things you did - it's much more comparable to writing a short story than a journal entry. With journal entries, the point is usually to trigger the memories of the event - with travel writing, you have to create the whole experience for the reader.
So more detail is the biggest thing here. Pick a couple of the things you remember doing and spin it into a lush, exciting tale.
Hope this helped! Good luck, and keep writing!
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