Mom, I'm in love with a girl

hey there! I know I might be late for the party but who cares I love your poems. If you do not remember me, I am Ina aka loveissourgrapes. I am here to give your poem a review/comment. Compared to your other poems, this seems very light, even the topic, alike "I am no longer innocent - True events". I don't feel you because I am straight but it is okay if you're preference is way different from mine. I don't mind, you can like whoever you want. Anyways, let's get straight to the point.

"All my life,
I was told,
I would get with a handsome
Kind man"

Every adult who aren't my parents have told me the same thing. I just tell them, dating and having a man isn't in mind right now. But you never know if I will because sometimes I wake up and think it is the end of the world already. But yes, this is true to people like you.

"I was told that
I would be a princess
And that I would have a prince"

I love how this could be like a fairytale. I also love how the front is different, like a typewriter type of letters. It also seems like a letter you sent to your mom. And it is very imaginary and is written well. Like you've been wanting to tell your mom about how you really feel about both boys and girls, and you have just found the words now.

"I was not told,
That I would fall in love,
With a princess like me"

This stanza reminds me of those songs of Clairo, girl in red. Their music is good and are definitely written for people like you.

"I am sorry to disappoint,
To disturb,
To frighten,
But, you are my mother and deserve to hear"

This tells that you love you mom and you want her to really know. It's just that you do not know how is she going to react. If she was disappointed, disturbed, frightened or enlightened and understanding. She shouldn't be disturbed, she could be a little frightened or disappointed if she is a religious or doesn't support people like you. But if I was your mother, I don't know how to react because I am not a mother.

"Mom,
I am in love with a girl
A princess who is my whole world"

This is a good closing for a poem like this. But I would love to have a part two to know how your mother reacted to this. Overall, it is good. Keep on writing and expressing your feelings to your parents. It is a good thing to do that especially when you are a young teen struggling with problems, going through phrases, finding out new things, and growing up. I hope you have a good day/night c:

boo!
i think this poem has a meaning to it. i personally dont feel like there is anything wrong with loving a girl. you love who you love. no one can change it. your mom can try but she cant do anything when you become an adult, right? yes, it is typical for a boy to be with a girl, its considered " proper" and " normal" for a girl and a boy to be together. but i would rather have things go differently than to play the game. who says that you cant be in love with a girl? lots of people, im sure. but what can they do about it? im in the same boat as you. im in love with a girl too despite being a girl myself, and my mother isnt too sunshine and rainbows about it. i suggest you dont talk about it until she accepts it. that what i did and sooner or later my mom learned to accept my decision. maybe you should try to do the same?
i wish you luck! go get 'em! you got this!

hi!!

i love this poem. i know the feeling when you know you have to tell your loved ones something that might change the course of your relationship with them irreversibly and forever, and i think this poem captures that feeling very well.

i loved how you centred the poem around the idea of fairy tales (especially since they are extremely heteronormative) and used them to frame how coming realise your sexuality really felt. it’s a very clever use of imagery. you’ve written a very honest and sincere poem and i think that’s reflected in the language and voice you’ve gone for—not too formal or descriptive, instead almost conversational—and i think that works very well. it reminds me of the kind of things i would write to myself when i was wondering how i would ever come out to my parents: conscious of the ways it could go wrong, but ultimately refusing to compromise your own story just so you fit into somebody else’s idea of what your story ‘should be’ (a princess and a prince, instead of a princess and a princess or a prince and a prince).

to conclude—all praise from me. this is a lovely poem and i think the sentiments it writes about are very precious and important.

bravo, and keep writing! <3

Hi there!


I just wanted to say that I think that this poem is very meaningful. It says what you think the reader (or your mom) might feel after hearing those words. I also like the repetition where it says "I was told that" but then toward the end, it says "I was not told,". Honestly, I just love this poem in general.

Hello Sugar puppy!

I know you haven't met me before but I understand from a personal level how it is to want to say things to our loved ones and not being able to find the words to say it...

Poetry is like your best friend. The more you get to know your friend the more you will understand what your friend may need. Your expression is key point and right on! I will have to say the punctuation got me a little mixed up! I truly believe that the more you write the more you will be able to learn yourself how you would like to write your poetry. I hope to read more from you soon and give a bit more useful reviews!

Hi Sugarscherrypop!

I'm new here too! I love your poem so much. The lesbian theme is very cool. I love your self-expression and confidence!

Poetry is poetry, but I have a few things I would like to point out:

1) punctuation. Again, it depends on your poetic style, but not every line needs a comma after it. For example, after 'I would be a princess,' there is no need for a comma.

2) rhythm. As I can see this is freestyle poetry, there is no rule with rhyming. However, I would recommend reading this poem out to yourself. For instance, I feel that 'All my life, / I was told, /' does not need a line spilt, as the lines feel too short with a line break. In contrast, the line 'But, you are my mother and deserve to hear' feels too long. The 'I am' s could also be shortened into 'I'ms'.

3) grammar. There is only one mistake here and it is extremely minor, so there is no need to worry. 'But, you are my mother and deserve to hear' should be 'But, you are my mother and deserves to hear' instead.

Girly pop. Like first of all, wow! I'm new to this platform but reading this felt so cool. Cool's not a really "good" way to describe how I felt reading this but it really does sound like you know how to write well.😅