A unhealed child
Who walks aimlessly through life
No guide in how to heal the pain that it feels
It’s surroundings is full of sorrow
The laughter echoes around its surroundings
Unheard its cries of pain
The heart of the unhealed child use to strong and a whole Now it's fragile and into pieces
It’s fragile heart is shattered on the ground
Too tried to fix the broken heart lay on the ground
The scars left on the body of the unhealed child
No one notices the scars unless the child say something about it
Then the people around fakely pretend that they care about it
The next second they forget about it
They move on through their life as nothing happened
Not noticing that the unhealed child is just standing there crying
Unhealed child its wounds are getting bigger each day that passes
Unsure in how many wounds it has
Some are there but unseen and not important enough to be seen
It wonders when someone will hear its cries
It’s spirit was so vibrant before but over time became dull and deep in sorrow
The unhealed child looking for hand that is reaching out
To help and save the unhealed child
But nowhere to be seen a hand in this darkness
Unhealed child
The unhealed child can’t tell no one as no one would understand the pain that is feeling
They just deny the pain telling the unhealed child that the pain isn’t there or they making it up
Family doesn’t seem to care about child who is suffering with pain
The burden that carries on its weak shoulders getting heavier each day
The burden of family, school, friends and social society get heavier
Even so with these burden the unhealed child puts everyone's needs before its needs
Thinking it's selfish to puts its needs before others
Even with biggest pain the unhealed child puts a worn out smile masking the pain
If you look closely enough you can tell that the smile is not genuine smile
The unhealed child act like it fine and its not drowning in its thoughts
From the outside you can’t tell that the child is suffering
Cause the child hides it so well it seems invisible
But deep inside its fighting demons a battle the constantly happens
Not a single of moment for the child to relax
Unhealed child will have guild itself to heal and recover the pain that the people around caused
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Hello!
This poem is very very good. It is also very relatable. In the begging of the poem you say "A unhealed child Who walks aimlessly through life No guide in how to heal the pain that it feels" This line is very good and talks of how when you have a broken/hurt child in you you kind of don't know where you fit in and don't know what to do with your life. It also shows how that when you do get hurt either mentally or emotionally as a child it stays with you and you never got to learn how to heal that wound.
"The scars left on the body of the unhealed child No one notices the scars unless the child say something about it Then the people around fakely pretend that they care about it" In this line I feel like this can mean multiple things. What i read it as was scars that you give yourself and also the mental scars that you carry. Since they never notice them and when they do find out about them it seems as if they don't really care about them and they are simply acting like they do.
In this line "Unsure in how many wounds it has" i also interpreted it has the wounds you give yourself as it says that they're not sure how many wounds they have because it is getting progressivly worse.
In this line "Even so with these burden the unhealed child puts everyone's needs before its needs Thinking it's selfish to puts its needs before others" I feel that it show that the child is people pleaser because instead of taking care of their problems and asking for help they take it upon themselves to fix other peoples problems because they think it selfish to ask for help.
in this last line "Cause the child hides it so well it seems invisible But deep inside its fighting demons a battle the constantly happens Not a single of moment for the child to relax Unhealed child will have guild itself to heal and recover the pain that the people around caused" I feel that this shows even more on how being hurt in childhood can affect you as you get older. it gets to the point were they are trying to hide it still that they think no one can see what is truly happening but the child knows that deep down that they are fighting demons and its constant, which is kind of whast deppresion feels like because you are constnalty battling yourself in your head and it is never ending and you can never catch a break. The very last line you say how the child finally decides to heal themselves of the wounds from other people which a lot of people have too do.
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Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
This poem is about a child who had some kind of trauma that never healed, and is expected to just carry on life as normal. This can be interpreted in many different ways.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
You may benefit from having stanzas in your poem, which may help separate ideas and make reading easier. (On yws, I think it doesn't let you have multiple enter spaces, so I think you have to put dashes or some kind of placeholder between stanzas). This knowledge base article goes more in depth about stanzas
Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
I really like the last four lines of the ending. They are really impactful and perfectly wrap up the piece:
This shows how the child finally realizes how nobody else in the world wants to help them, and how they can only rely on themself
Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts
Amazing poem! I hope my review could be helpful. I wish you a good day/night!
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