Fire crackling softly
Lips whispering briefly
Hands holding tightly
Hearts bonding smoothly
Sun dipping slowly
Crickets humming gently
watermelon crunching sweetly
Aummer fading quietly
Teens falling effortlessly
In Love.
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I would like to say that I totally loved the poem. But you need to fix some punctuation. You had no periods or comas. Although you added one at the end. Also it was very short. And you don't have to capitalize it except at the beginning and after periods. But besides all that. I loved it. 100%. Just fix those mistakes and hope for better reviews in the future. I believe in you.
Punctuation and capitalization are stylistic devices and are not set in stone, no poem is ever too short.
Hey there, just wanted to tell you that you did a good job. Summer may not be my favorite season, but I can still see the beauty of it. I really liked it and understood. I am a little confused about something though... "Aummer fading quietly" maybe I'm stupid but I'm not sure what that means. I wanted to say amber or something like that. Regardless you did a good job. Keep up the good work. I hope to see more of you in the future. Good luck love.
*Hugs*
Soulfulwriter here to report....review on this lovely piece of artwork. So, Speakerskat tell me how it feels to be fabulous?
Review: Short, sweet, and to the point of why people love summer.
Personal opinion: I love summer because it's when I was born. In August, sad part about that is sometimes it's always the day we all go back to school depending on the district you live in. So, I would have to celebrate my birthday on a weekend. Which was fine, I never really broadcasted my birthday to the entire school by wearing one of those 'it's my birthday, give me money' ribbons. But, it was great.
Summer the time of breaks, pool parties, camping, pit fires...I know that's wrong but I hope you get the idea, Bar-B-Qs, and family fun time. No need to worry about school, projects, homework, being popular, or stressing out because you have a deadline. Unless you are a poor sap that has to take summer school classes, nothing wrong with yall, just saying.
Keep writing the right way. -signing out.-