Great song ! your very talented .
Author's note: I played and sung this song so if you're able, please listen along (by clicking this link) as you read!
Here, where it began you held your
Heart between your hands
It fell through your fingers like sand
And never were you found the same again
Dying like a fading light,
So was your hope cloaked in night
And no one pressed you, dared to change
‘Cause none knew you by your true name
Intertwined and stories told
But I knew that your heart was sold
To another, greater wine
You thirst for justice and a sign
Go home, Go home
There’s nothing left for you, now
Take your bags
Go home, go home
We were friends when you were tame
But as time passed, passed the blame
On your lying, stone-carved face
You picked your life up and gave chase
Run, boy run, I know you’re fast
I know you’re running from your past
So count me as just one more pain
To leave in dust, what’s lost is gain
Go home, Go home
There’s nothing left for you here
Take your bags
Go home, go home
“What if there is no home I can return to
And there’s no place I can call home?”
You should’ve thought of that ‘fore you deceived me
So go on, you’re in this alone
Go home, Go home
There’s nothing for you here, now
Take your bags
Go home, go home
I'm not going to review this because I have nothing to add, but this was too amazing to not comment on. Beautiful music, and the lyrics are very well-written and emotional. Great job!
hey there! sorry for commenting twice, but while i was listening to it i just had say something. i’m harper, and i’m here to review these absolutely stunning song by you, soundofmind! ok, so my thoughts whilst listening: at the beginning, i thought you sounded a little breathy, but i quickly changed my mind. the harmony was stunning. wow, her breath control is amazing. and finally, the sent chills up my spine! this was so impressive! not only did you write these haunting lyrics, but also the instrumental? so much talent in one person! i really have no criticism here, as this was breath taking for me. you really could impress anyone with this. as i said before, this was haunting, with such an impressive and impowering message. for the times i’m going through, this hit close to home. keep up the good work and thanks for reading! have a wonderful day.
with all my support, harper louise.
Wow! I really enjoyed this I especially liked that you made an audio with it that was really cool and the instrumental and singing is really good. It gives off a very strong feeling but in a really good way. The song flowed really well. When the go home part came it was so somber but like in a really good way especially the high notes. Keep writing/ singing I hope to review more from you soon!
hello, it's yellow!
the music nerd in me had to review this and listen to it and I LOVE IT! this is absolutely gorgeous and the composition of the song itself is absolutely wonderful. i thoroughly enjoyed how you incorporated harmonies and variations in rhythm. i thought your phrasing was very interesting, but i loved it nonetheless.
with the lyrics itself, i really enjoyed how it tells a story. there's a progression of the story and i really do admire that. in your singing, i'd also like to note that i love the fidelity in your voice and tone, while the lyrics themselves are, in a sense, mysterious and vehement with emotion. one of my critiques is that your diction in a few places seemed a bit muddled, so i really had to look at the lyrics to follow along. while i was listening and reading along, i did have a thought.
“What if there is no home I can return to
And there’s no place I can call home?”
You should’ve thought of that ‘fore you deceived me
So go on, you’re in this alone
Go home, Go home
There’s nothing for you here, now
Take your bags
Go home, go home
Hi soundofmind!
I have never reviewed lyrics before, but I will give it my best try since I love this song so much. This song is so beautiful and I am so glad that you included a recording of you singing this song. Your voice is incredible, and I loved it when you added the harmony part because it really added a haunting feeling that was very beautiful. This sounds like a sad and pained song and it really conveys heartwrenching emotions very well. I love the lyrics because they communicate your message really well. I don't have any criticism because I feel like this was very well written and sung. So anyway, great job on this, it was so cool to listen to it! As always, keep writing and I look forward to reading and listening to your future pieces. Good luck!
Jeeeez, Sound. This is something quite incredible. I would totally buy this if it was on an album, the composition and vocals are amazing and it's so clean it sounds professionally made. I hope you never under appreciate your own talent.
OMG! This was sooo amazing. Sorry I am not writing it as a review for your work but seriously this song was amazing. I was literally sitting depressed with my college work at 2AM and feeling panicky but then just randomly I opened this and listened to your song. I felt so relieved and calm. sorry I am still new here didn't know you were a girl and I was first expecting a male voice, but then it was a surprise But I must say your voice was really very good. <3
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