Young Writers Society

'Ello there!

There's a lot of crow imagery, and I don't know if that is something that is a symbol relating to Mother Earth, or just what worked best in the poem. In a way, it's a little like it was stuffed in to be a bit of filler. There's beaches, roots, trees, and then crows. If this is about air pollution and how it's affecting birds, maybe reworking that would be better, because I am confused.

Another meaning I could get out of that is that it's a reference to people who destroy Earth. I mainly get this from "Sucking every single sliver of life," but that could also just be relating to how crows are omens of bad luck to some people. Although, in what I was told to believe, crows mean that you will transform into a better person and change will find you.

We, the crows

clever and opportunistic

Sucking every single sliver of life

From the place that once provided for us

little monsters floating about on a crippled, lifeless asteroid

The author's love for nature and fear of her destruction narrated in a lovely way. Yes, we cannot live without her because we are part of her. As you have mentioned we are opportunistic and exploit our mother for temporary gains.

Ok. I noticed that you don't have any reviews. SO here i am. The lovely theo to review your poem. Its random i know but whatevs.
You poem hold the words hidden under our skin. "We, the crows

clever and opportunistic

Sucking every single sliver of life

From the place that once provided for us

little monsters floating about on a crippled, lifeless asteroid"
THis is literally the truth about us. (not being mean to anyone)
It takes a amazing person to be able to word this and be so true and Honestly this was amazing and i would read it again and again.

Wow! Amazing poem! I really liked it!

thanks for reading <3