Young Writers Society

shusher says...

How does one get better without creating an utter flop?
To help you out though, this, just like anything I write... ever... was experimental. The curiosity/inspiration for this one was to throw words/phrases together which are opposite.
In the first example: "raindrops of sun..." sun doesn't appear in during the rain, but the two go together "...reflect off summer snow" what is summer snow? Well, I'm from Michigan, so it's just regular snow, but that's not what I mean here. what I mean here is... a whole lot of nothing. The whole idea is that it's confusing.

The inquisitor, as so creatively named, is questioning everything. Nothing makes sense to him like nothing makes sense here.

So, the first stanza is the most explainable where the speaker is confused like the reader is (I tend to enjoy making the reader feel like they're the speaker. So, if you're confused, that, to me, in a weird way, is a good thing).

the first couplet of stanza 2 runs in the format of stanza 1, but the second couplet... that's where things start to get interesting.
"My arms are still / swinging."
The sentence is "My arms are still swinging," but there's a break... I think you get what's going on here.

3rd stanza. super confusing. no doubt. the speaker know's he's not sure, so he's constantly questioning, as you would have an inquisitor do, but what he doesn't know is that he doesn't need to question everything because he already knows the answer. To what? I don't know. I just have fun writing.

stanza 4... I don't like any of it, but the show must go on...
There's been this progression of confusion so I figured, "Why not make it even more chaotic?" So I have words splitting up and sentences start to overlap each other.

"This in-consistent pat / turn / over"
Starting with 'in-consistent' that is to say things are consistent. They are in consistency, and they aren't consistent meaning they're inconsistent. To say all that in only a word, I used... ya know.
'pat / turn' is our next animal which definitely has a wild side still, and isn't fully house broken.
The main idea here is that there's this inconsitent but consistent pattern that keeps happening. Yet, it's confusing, so life feels kinda choppy. When I wrote this I thought of a metalich machine that's been rusted, over used, or maybe... a rusted bike chain. You start to petal it and before the full rotation, it stops because of all the rust and you have to get the second syllable out 'pat/turn'
'turn / over'
using the same syllable from the previous word, I start a sentence before the last one ends (which is something I want to see done well so if you want to take that idea and run with it, be my guest).
The idea is the audience will think "pattern over and over again" but instead of the second 'over' they see 'start' so you see "turn over and start again" but the ending was awful and... has no explanation lol.

Radrook says...

What does it mean when a reply involving such links is given?

shusher says...

I don't know. lol

zaminami says...

@shusher is tagging the people who asked to be tagged