Published August 10, 2010
Truth is, life in its self is like one big o'll story. With its unexpected twists and turns it keeps you carrying on. Waiting; forever-waiting for the big climax to either make it a story to remember, one one that one would wish to forget. The moral of the story is, whatever the situation your in you have to fight through it, do this your own way and no one else's and follow your hearts' instinct, because you never know what's going to happen next.
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Hey I am going to review your work:D
I agree with soink here, it does sound like you haven't checked through, or used spell check, but here is the spellings and gramatical errors I found.
Okay, I think this should be The truth is. Also, the word O'll isn't slang for old. It is better to use old.
This isn't a full sentence
I think you mean whatever situation you're in.
Overall, your wording isn't particually varied, your sentences generally don't make sense. This is a good concept, but the way you have written it, doesn't match it. You need to check your spellings and grammatical errors, and add a bit more too this because it is very short, but other than that, I think it can work
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Hey seana!
This kind of looks like you wrote it really late at night! There are lots of typos, repeated words, misplaced apostrophes, strange punctuation... you name it and it's there! So you might want to fix that.
As far as this idea goes... one huge thing that I think you may be missing is the whole death part of life. It just seems strange not to have that in here when you're talking about waiting forever for the big climax, when really, nobody makes it out alive.
I'm not sure if you wanted to delve into that matter, mind you. But it seems very lacking to me! You may want to change the word "life"?
Nice story. I likes this story. I like the way you presenteed each element. I applause you.