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Hello there! First of all, I would like to let you know that I don't have a good sense of English grammar and punctuation myself. Moreover, it is a problem shared by most if not all of us non-native speakers of English. And I think we deserve to be "tolerated" for the occasional solecism. That being said, one needs to offer obeisance to a language- the supreme tool of literature. What I mean is we need to at least make efforts to minimize the distortions; so that the reader does not find it annoying or illegible. All of this becomes more prominently pressing when writing an article- which is expected to be rather formal. Needless to say spelling are of equal importance. A single spelling mistake can give a whole different meaning and we don't want that, do we?

Now to your content. You purpose to make a point that everyone in the world from Gandhi and Mother Teresa down to all of us are selfish and that is the very nature of any living being. I don't know how much I agree here. But one thing is for sure- I CANNOT discard its possibility. The more I think about it, it turns into a rather surreal subject.

However things could be different, you could have persuaded me into it- had the writing been more "soothing".Hence, I would like to request you to rewrite this without any haste utilizing your full potentials.I am sure it will then be one of the best (and most debated as well) article here on YWS. I hope you don't find me discourteous because that isn't what I was aiming for.
If I offended you in anyway, Apologies!

Keep writing. Keep reviewing, Teammate!

Whoa, ok. So, first of all. I love the content and ideas explored in this article, is interesting because I have never though of selfishness in that way but you also make a very good point of it. We all do something because doing it always benefits us in some way, I do not believe that a person would randomly do a thing that doesn't benefit themselves in some way. So, good point there. And I also like the message of being you, that everything starts with you being the central figure of yourself. Be independt, be confident, love yourself so you and love others. So, content wise, I'm speechless,

But grammar wise, I'm annoyed, this is an article. So please write in full language with proper punctuation and grammar, no text language because it honestly putted me off. Just write in full, like u into you, and add full stops at the end of your sentences. So, just watch our for those little things in the future and no text language! Other than that, I think you have written a really well thought out article here, well done!

Keep calm and stay epic~

-S.s

This is a strongly written essay with an interesting opinion on the topic.
I paticularly enjoyed this "If you feel happy by dancing do it, if you feel happy by helping others do it"
I think you made some good points by bringing Gandhi and Mother Theresa into it. They are two people who you wouldn't normally think of as selfish however you raised some interesting points as to how they are.
Another strong part of your essay was this: If you want to help people, if you want to make a difference you need to first start with yourself.

The man who does not value himself, cannot value anything or anyone” – aynrand

For eg. In an airplane also(at high altitude) they tell you to put on your masks first and then put it on for your children.

They are not asking you to be selfish but they don’t want you to pass out when putting on the masks for your children.

This is what I mean. Success begins with you. You need to start with yourself first and then focus on others.

If you want to give lots of money to charity then you need to first be making lots of money to give away. If you want to help people who are sick then you need to spend years focusing on your books and then you will be able to focus on helping others.

I do have one minor complaint. When writing an essay try to write in full words with no text language.

Other than that well done and keep writing.