Binge reading these poems, making me tear up... And I am sorry
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If I had to lose you I would never move,
I would never look around, never leave
I still remember how you were here with me
such a kind soul, such warm hands,
maybe the first I felt in a long time
always behind with a smile so sweet
maybe I'll never meet you,
I'll never feel that warmth again,
trying to hold onto the memories
everything seems so far now, but the thought of you.
Hey there! First of all, welcome to YWS, and here for a review. Let's deal with the grammatical mistakes which I think are there in your poem.
If I had to lose you I would never move
I would never look around, never leaveI feel the same about it. It should have been 'I would have never looked around'trying to hold onto the memories
everything seems so far now, but the thought of you
Hi @rinkimy I'm here to do a real short review on this poem. So lets get right into it shell we.
If I had to lose you I would never move,
I would never look around, never leave
I still remember how you were here with me
such a kind soul, such warm hands,
maybe the first I felt in a long time
always behind with a smile so sweet
maybe I'll never meet you,
I'll never feel that warmth again,
trying to hold onto the memories
everything seems so far now, but the thought of you.
Hey, FlamingPhoenix here with a review for you on this very cold day. Lol I hope you enjoy!
Let's get started shall we!
If I had to lose you I would never move,
I still remember how you were here with me
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