JustMe.

by ractavia
  • March 20, 2012
  • Poetry
  • Realistic
  • Poems.
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Everything happens for a reason
Whether it's done out of love or strife.
Everyone one has a bad season,
That's just a misfortune of life.
We don't always see eye to eye
No matter how badly we wish
We may break an arm or a thigh
But there's more to fry than one fish
You don't understand where I'm from
I've hurt people and been hurt too
I try so hard to keep moving on
And the thing is, I'm me, not you
I'm nowhere near the perfect boy
And I'm not going to just sit here
I am not your little toy
I won't let you turn my life into fear
I will go off and be something great
I will one day be set free
I will meet my fate
I will be JustMe.
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Deanie
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Deanie wrote a review · Wed Mar 21, 2012 4:59 pm

Hello!

I really liked this poem. It shows someone taking a stand for themselves and being who they are. I think it all flowed well, the story came across really good and I like the rhyming :) It all seemed to fit. There was one line I would make a little longer though:

I am not your little toy

I would make that 'because I am not your little toy' to make it seem more even with the rest of the lines.
But it was a really great poem!

Deanie x



Wicked people never have time for reading. It's one of the reasons for their wickedness.
— Lemony Snicket