Published January 4, 2019
A true friend will love you to the end of time
A true friend will make complete your other half.
A true friend will realize you shine,
A true friend will make cherish you and make you laugh.
This is a really cheesy poem, but I wrote it on an inspiration. The inspiration was the friendship I have made with a girl on here.... @FireSpyGirl Thank you SO much for EVERYTHING!!!!
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A true friend will tell you when you have made a bad poem, so true friend if I do let me know okay? You did great. I love your poem there is nothing cheesy about it, you should let friends know how you feel even your best friends need positive reinforcement and the kind of positive innocent unconditional care this poem shows. It is short yes, but meaning and length are two different things and I think this portrays beautiful plainly spoken meaning. I loved this refreshing poem very much. Thank you for blessing this site with such a cheerful beautiful poem.
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Hey there PoTatOe001!
Selina from DoubleRiders here to review some of your work! First off, let me say that this was a cute little poem and not what I expected when I first clicked on it. I am torn because I like the cuteness of it, the way that it is short and sweet, but I also feel like it should have more...
It’s completely up to you, but I think that it could be added to and still keep its beauty. I don’t like to repeat what other reviewers have already said, so I just have one suggestion. On the third line, you could say “ A true friend will help you to shine” or “A true friend will bring out your shine” just a thought. Something I would do but not necessarily a “correction”.
Anyways, that is all I have. Awesome poem! Keep sharing your work!
~ DoubleRiders~
Hi, Liberty500 here for a quick and short review!
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First of all, that's so cute PoTatOe001! I love it! It's not cheesy at all! You expressed your emotions to a good friend of yours (aka FireSpyGirl) and that's the important part!
Onto the review now:
There's one thing that I found here in this sentence: "A true friend will realize you shine," Is it supposed to be "your" instead of "you"?
And in this sentence: "A true friend will make cherish you and make you laugh." Is "make cherish you" supposed to be "cherish you"? (I'm not so good with complex words like: cherish, so I'm not a hundred percent sure about it. You just might want to check it.
Hope to see more from you soon!
Keep on writing!
~Liberty500
This poem was really good and relatable, however I wish there was more, it was very short. If it was a little longer, it would be great!
Second, this is a personal preference, but I wish it rhymed. That would be great, and it would tie it together.
Overall, this is a great poem, I loved it, it just needs to be a little longer, great job, though!
As always, keep writing! And have fun doing it!
@FireSpyGirl this is dedicated to you
Thank you so much! I don't know what to say....