Young Writers Society

Hi Pandacow.

First off, interesting username - pandas are definitely one of the coolest animals in existence. Okay, onto the review!

I like how you start the story off in the height of the action, no buildup just boom - annihilation. This immediately engaged me and the fast-pace of your writing style kept me hooked to the very end.
Your word choice was very interesting. I felt like I was reading an epic such as the Illiad or Beowolf, especially once I reached the monologue in the fourth paragraph.
I think the word choice does a great job dramatizing the story, portraying this standoff as the monumental event that it surely is.
I agree with @vampricone6783 that your main character possesses similar traits to Thanos in how he considers himself both "The End of All Things" and the "bringer of balance". He wants to bring balance, but what I'm curious to know is how this act of destruction is achieving balance? Is he aligning more with Thanos by forcing population control for the greater good of the civilization or is there another reason afoot?
By calling this event the "Day of Judgment" it gives me the impression that the main character considers himself greater than the tainted men before him (hence the "tainted desire"). Perhaps he seeks to conduct a cleansing for the greater good of purifying the world of man's corruption? Sorry this is just me philosophizing. It's stories with dynamic characters such as this that are so fun to theorize about.
This just goes to show how intriguing your story is and I'm hoping you post more so I can learn how the story further develops.

Also, I do have a few line-edit suggestions you can take as you will:
"I am The End of All Things, the devastator of all that can be, and will be. I am the beginning of the end, as well as the end of the beginning. I am the bringer of balance… The King of A Thousand Names..." (Since you capitalized the first name I would recommend captilazing any names following to maintain consistency).
"I stood alone with a proverbial and manic look embellished across my face, as the cornucopia of destruction and agony encircled the blood-barren battlefield, I gazed at the army of knights that stood before me with a look of malevolence, their swords of steel drawn, ready to face despair head-on." (I enjoy how vivid your descriptions are but this first sentence is bordering on purple prose and I got a little winded reading it all within one sentence. Possibly breaking this up into multiple sentences would help the ideas to flow more concisely or reducing the amount of descriptions used would also do the trick. Sometimes less is more).

Anyways, thank you for sharing, this was indeed a very fun read!

- PoetryMisfit

Hmm..This god character is giving me Thanos vibes from Avengers:Infinity war with the talk of bringing death destruction and balance.That’s just what I got.This also sounds like it could be the beginning of a fantasy novel,something I’d totally read! So nice job! I thought that this was really interesting.I don’t have a favorite part.Well,maybe I do.It’s when the God is describing it’s power.You can feel the emotion from it.I hope you have a good day/night.