Hello there, Orel!
This is Moonwatcher here with a Review Day review!
You're very emotional, which I can tell through the nice way that you presented your tone and mood in the poem, and very passionate/dedicated about your opinion.
Although punctuation/grammar issues may be a stylistic choice, you seem to have inconsistent punctuation, present in some places, and not available in others. I assume you're using punctuation after conjunctions (periods) and after complete sentences (periods), however, the lack of punctuation is frequently absent. I advise that you either remove punctuation, or make your punctuation use consistent.
(Small note: Suggest putting this in the politics genre. I interpreted this poem as a poem about the government/it's tyranny over the people, so do tell me if I'm mistaken.)
You serpents!
Supporting the fact that the government is ruled by illuminati man eating reptiles, eh?
If this was indeed about the government, I wonder what country you're talking about? I honestly wouldn't be surprised if it were America, cause I mean, look at our government.
Sorry that there wasn't much criticism in this review, the poem was really short, after all. I feel as if the strongest thing about this poem was the voice behind the narrator. It was very moving and powerful, so nice job, and I hope this review helps you out! ^-^
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