Schools finally came to an end.
Let the summer days began,
With no more teachers,
No more friends.
No more......
No more hiding,
Lying or covered scars.
Back to being the unwanted,
The unheared....
Stuck in a prison,
Gasping for air..
With no escape....
But a new summer has come,
One with sunshine, and smiles.
So no more,
Tears....hiding... or lying.
Im finally free.
Im not worthless. ...
I am something ,
And will be someone!
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Hello! Breaking free from school... sweet feeling it gives. From the usual downs of life in school that we pretty much suffer one time or another.
Totally loved the part where you kept on using "no more". It swept me away, literally. And also the use of ellipsis.
Great work, can't see any problem with your punctuation or spelling.
Summer, hope I'd get a feeling of what it's like. We don't experience the four seasons here. Bad luck for me, I guess.
Hope I get to read much of your work!
Thxz
I agree school has no end it's like goes on forever
I get what you're saying about finally free
It living free without the pressure of others around you every single day
It's like living life with you're guard up every day
Just to get beat down to the ground
But you're poem was well written and well explained
And it relates to something everyone knows and feels or felt at one point
It's ingenious
Summer rocks why does haft to END!!
Can't wait to read more of your work
Love ,teacake013
Thxz
No problem
Lol well this is my own piece but anyway I like the concept but I think I couldve done way better seems lik im missing something idk but I jus wana delete it and start fresh on this topic its not to bad tho .but ur main goal is workin on punctuation and gramnar cuz u hav a bad habitat or puttin n txt lang. N etc ull get better tho dnt quut on urr dream
-oldsoulxoxo aka you lol
Keep writing and plz keep postin earning points ad b creative
You can't review your own work
Lol its jus fun chill
>says something calmly
>"DUDE MAN DON'T GET ANGRY"
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