*Vocab:
pakpak ng anghel means angel wings
Lolo means grandpa
Ibon means bird
I feel you here
at school
on the bus
in this house
A man stolen from Earth too soon
A man undeserving of death
God forbid cancer had to eat you up
But God asked his sweet angels
to bring you home
to set you free
where you should be and would be
I feel you everywhere
Your beautiful pakpak ng anghel tucked behind your back
Only visiting for a while
In the form of a little red Ibon
Smile still loving
I miss you, Lolo
And I always will
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Hi! Walker here! You are my first review in a while so hopefully this goes well.
My condolences to you and your family. Cancer is a heart breaking disease, your grandfather seems to be a good man you look up to and I hope he is doing amazing in the afterlife.
This poem is very emotional and it honestly brought a tear to my eye. The line that says, "I feel you everywhere" hit hard because I can agree with that line. I believe people are watching over us and sometimes you feel as if they are near like a whiff of their smell or the feeling they used to give you.
Your thoughts on the afterlife and your writing are beautiful. Although it is somber it is a gorgeous piece. I can feel the emotion within your writing and I can agree with it. It is heavy but loving.
Thank you for writing this! Have an amazing day!
Sincerely Walker.
tysm <333
Of course!
Hello, my name is CATS and I'm here to review this sorrowful poem. I can feel your emotions rushing towards me like a tsunami. Let's start!
I really understand this. My grandpa died from cancer as well, a victim of the horrible murderer. I can relate to this, therefore, I am here for you, my friend. I love how you poured your heart, feelings, and emotions into this heart wrenching poem. Poems can really help, can't them?
It gave me shivers when I read this. Shivers of how much love was broken.
OVERALL: I really loved this heartbreaking love. I'm here for you. This is so sad, yet so peaceful.
Happy Reading, Happy Writing, Happy Poetry, and Happy RevMo!
Love,
CATS
tyyy CATS <3
No prob!!!