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Royalty

by noelani2004


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Kings and Queens 

Royalty from the blood 

You say you wanna be them,  

But they don't get no love

Yeah they seem fearsome, 

Like a God from up above

Can't you see that their servents working so hard,

Yet the King can't even walk across the boulevard, 

No you shouldn't want to be this

All they do is sneak dis, 

All they know is conflict, 

Take care of your own shit, 

Man they make me so sick, 

If you gonna act like a prince, 

 Better do it on your own risk, 

Stacking dem papers, 

Got em dressed just like royalty 

Got so much land there's ackers, 

But still they got all that disloyalty

Richer than the mayor,  

Need to look at their reality 

No I'm not hatin 

But taton 

They keep tryin me 

People of all varieties 

 A beautiful society 

You should care more about yourself 

And stop cryin to me

You said your not royalty 

Quit lying to me

Where's your utility 

Stop feeling sorry 

I'm tellin you I wouldn't be the man I am today, 

People ask me would I go back,

Oh no, no way

I know you still don't understand, but you haven't given me the chance to say

Stop tryin to be a King,  when a king is lower than their servants

Act nice, and be free,

Enjoy the little moments:) 


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Thu Dec 14, 2017 7:43 pm
raventotherow12 says...



It was pretty good, and i actually wrote a story about a girl who was royalty when i was younger and your poem kinda sounds like the story i wrote




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Mon Nov 06, 2017 11:19 pm
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Hello noelani2004! Welcome to YWS! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside, I'm not the best at lyrics but here we go!

Bold = grammar and flow issues.
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Underline = krazy Kara komments.

Spoiler! :
Kings and Queens {--}

Royalty from the blood

You say you wanna be them,

But they don't get no love{.}

{Add a "--" here to separate stanzas}

Yeah{,} they seem fearsome,

Like a God from up above{.}

Can't you see that their servents working so hard,

Yet the King can't even walk across the boulevard{!}

{--}

No{,} you {don't} want to be this

All they do is sneak dis, {Sneak what?}

All they know is conflict,

Take care of your own shit{.} {Nice}

{--}

Man they make me so sick,

If you gonna act like a prince,

Better do it on your own risk{.}

{--}

Stacking dem papers,

Got em dressed just like royalty

Got so much land there's ackers,

But still they got all that disloyalty

{--}

Richer than the mayor,

Need to look at their reality

No I'm not hatin{'}

But taton {What is this word}

They keep tryin me

People of all varieties

A beautiful society

{--}

You should care more about yourself

And stop cryin{'}[/] to me

You said [b]{you are}
not royalty

Quit lying to me

Where's your utility

Stop feeling sorry{.}

{--}

I'm tellin you I wouldn't be the man I am today,

People ask me would I go back,

Oh no, no way{.}

I know you still don't understand, but you haven't given me the chance to say

Stop tryin to be a King, when a king is lower than their servants

Act nice, and be free,

Enjoy the little moments:)


Fangirling:



OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

IF I HAD THE MONEY
LET ME TELL YOU HOW IT'D BE
I'D TAKE OVER THE COUNTRY
EVERYONE WOULD BOW TO ME!

SIT UP IN MY PALACE AND MAYBE
YOU WOULD BE MY QUEEN!
WE RUN THIS SHIP TOGETHER,
JUST YOU WAIT AND SEE
WE'LL BE ROYALTY!

Conor Maynard is life

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Overall, I actually truly liked! I can imagine this as a rap in like a Nicki Minaj voice or something haha. I want to record this so bad Great job and keep up the great work!

Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --

Kara

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Thu Nov 02, 2017 11:51 pm
LadyLayla says...



Nice work




noelani2004 says...


Thank you



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Thu Nov 02, 2017 11:41 pm
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This rap has a pretty good message about seeing further than just your social status in life. There was a really good phrase that resonated with me in there too,"If you gonna act like a prince Better do it at your own risk," along with,"...They got all the disloyalty." This is a good representation of how modern day political figures may seem like gods and kings, but in reality they're just normal people with the worlds on their backs, no one to actually help them along the journey of life.

The execution was really nice, at leased the way it sounded in my head, and it sends a good message that I think could help a lot of people these days!




noelani2004 says...


Thanks for your review.




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