Young Writers Society

Hi there!

Your poem can tell a story. It may seem sad but it still has hope in it in some way. I imagine many things as I read throughout the story. My favorite stanza is:

"the land is still fragile,
but coming back reed by reed,
nurse logs feeding new roots.
poison ivy covers the shore--
it might burn me when i
am forced to leave, but at least
if someone gets too close with axe-words
again, they will suffer
too."

Seems every metaphorical in a way. I like it. But my favorite lines are the last ones.

"and when i wash into the sea,
the bells will never toll for me"

These lines are just pretty, I don't know why but it just seems pretty. It also can be both sad and happy at the same time. I like this poem. Keep on writing! Merry Christmas too^^

Heyy, Good day to ya
So starting of quick:

"donne said no (wo)man is an island.
oh, but how i have tried
to prove him wrong, to break
myself away."

I haven't read much poetry to be honest, but I do like start of like how someone would start a story with a moral or lesson

"and my mercurial mind
burned what was left.

the land is still fragile,
but coming back reed by reed,
nurse logs feeding new roots.
poison ivy covers the shore--"

Love how metaphorical this is [or perhaps literal??] From how I interpret it; it tells me that this person cut themselves off from others but when reconnecting, the bonds are slowly forming again.

"it might burn me when i
am forced to leave, but at least
if someone gets too close with axe-words
again, they will suffer
too."

Mmmmh, wonderful. Again, from what I can see; this is suggesting that forming bonds is risky and when you are forced to break them, it will hurt you. But you find respite in the fact that it will hurt them too.

"and when i wash into the sea,
the bells will never toll for me"

Even if I am a bit confused about this one. I think it might be suggesting that you think that if you are gone, you will be forgotten[?]

Overall, I quite liked this, even if poetry is not my cup of tea. A metaphor that links to what feels like personal experience in a matter that everyone faces at some point.

Have a nice day!

This tells a story, i really enjoyed it and it made me imagine what the actual story was about, it was sad, yet happy in its own way, you should make more, this one was a really good one, i enjoyed the story you were trying to tell!