And God said, Let us make man in our image, after our likeness: and let them have dominion over every creeping thing that creepeth upon the earth.
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As He sat upon that ivory throne, He watched His creation grow. First those He named Adam and Eve, then their descendants and descendants’ descendants. With each generation, he watched as knowledge corrupted them. He watched as lust sullied their hearts and greed blighted their land. The all Powerful did nothing.
He was pure once, many heavenly days ago, long before His pet Man. Even during the days of Adam and Eve, there was a cleanliness to his heart and a virtue in his veins.
He watched as His creation waged wars with one another. He watched as they inflicted unimaginable cruelties on the smallest calf to the largest beast. He listened to their justifications; how they could rape, pillage, mangle and torture in the name of the all-loving, all-merciful Lord. Still, He did nothing.
Even the Almighty was not infallible, immune to corruption. In a temper, he banished the archangel Satan for wanting the very power He Himself craved. Achieved.
His creation did horrible, unspeakable things in His name.
His name.
And so He let it happen.
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Now the earth was corrupt in God’s sight and was full of violence. God saw how corrupt the earth had become, for all the people on earth had corrupted their ways. So God said to Noah, "I am going to put an end to all people, for the earth is filled with violence because of them. I am surely going to destroy both them and the earth."
God knew of the Bible and thought they wrote Him rather forgivingly.
In the days before the flood, people were eating and drinking, marrying and giving in marriage, and they knew nothing about what would happen until the flood came and took them all away.
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As He sat in that kingdom of His, surrounded by Angels who loved and served him, he reflected on the bright days of his youth. His mind, blind to the taste of true power, was white and unblemished. For millennia He was content just watching the grey static surrounding. When he grew bored with that colourless fuzz and finally created the Universe, those empty worlds delighted him for immeasurable aeons.
And then His kingdom of Heaven was born. In that, He felt true love for the first time, and so he created Angels to share in that love. Out of the pureness in His heart and the virtue in His veins, He created those wonderful beings. From the very first day, they were perfect and kind, and He was perfect and kind back. For some time, they lived just as Father and Child, but the Angels in their everlasting goodness sought to give recompense for the gift of birth. They began serving the heavenly Father; little gestures at first, sent out as probes, then larger ones as they grew more comfortable. God had never experienced such a thing.
He liked it very much.
Soon His head grew dizzy with all the gestures those perfect children made for Him. He began asking them - ordering them - for more. The Angels, confused yet still grateful, obliged, for they could see how happy it made their Father. But even those impeccable beings would grow weary in time. Father saw this and demanded more, more than His children could give. So He created New Children.
And now He sits above that precious, worshipping world; surrounded by Angels who love him.
Angels who love Him because they must.
Angels who love Him because they saw what happened to Lucifer.
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And God said, Let us make man in our image.
And God saw that it was good.
God saw all that He had made, and it was very good.
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Hey there! Happy Review Day. If there's one thing it's seems even this passage agrees on, it's that unlike angels, we all have free will, so here I am. I'm mostly going to focus on the way this is written, rather than try to convince you (who may not even align totally with what you've written) that you are misguided.
I think Spider did a really good job at explaining some of this already, but there isn't really a through to pull this all together for me. In fact, if you are going by the Biblical timeline, Satan and the angels existed at the same time as Adam and Eve, so jumping all the way to Noah before going back to Lucifer's fall was a bit jolting since we had just been going along a loose timeline but always moving forward.
Im also not sure i get the theory that because he was overwhelmed by angels he decided to make even more beings? That just sounds like adding chores to the list if you ask me. There also seems to be the idea that angels *have* to do what God asks, but then you later say they follow him because of what I assume.is fear of being cast out like Lucifer, so do they have free will or not?
Overall I guess it's dont really get the point of this? It seems to put an incredibly human view of a Being outside our little 3d world in terms of time and space, but doesnt really make a thesis around it. I just would have liked to see more of a nuanced or driven point.
~Messy
Hey there! Happy Review Day. If there's one thing it's seems even this passage agrees on, it's that unlike angels, we all have free will, so here I am. I'm mostly going to focus on the way this is written, rather than try to convince you (who may not even align totally with what you've written) that you are misguided.
I think Spider did a really good job at explaining some of this already, but there isn't really a through to pull this all together for me. In fact, if you are going by the Biblical timeline, Satan and the angels existed at the same time as Adam and Eve, so jumping all the way to Noah before going back to Lucifer's fall was a bit jolting since we had just been going along a loose timeline but always moving forward.
Im also not sure i get the theory that because he was overwhelmed by angels he decided to make even more beings? That just sounds like adding chores to the list if you ask me. There also seems to be the idea that angels *have* to do what God asks, but then you later say they follow him because of what I assume.is fear of being cast out like Lucifer, so do they have free will or not?
Overall I guess it's dont really get the point of this? It seems to put an incredibly human view of a Being outside our little 3d world in terms of time and space, but doesnt really make a thesis around it. I just would have liked to see more of a nuanced or driven point.
~Messy
Inconsistent Narrative Voice and Pacing
While the prose is striking, the shifts in tone and pacing are sometimes abrupt. The passage alternates between grand, biblical-style narration and a more personal, introspective analysis of God's thoughts. While this contrast can be effective, in some places it feels unbalanced. For example:
The transition from God's passive inaction ("Still, He did nothing") to His sudden rage ("So God said to Noah, 'I am going to put an end to all people'") feels slightly rushed.
The early sections focus on God's observations, but the latter part becomes more psychological, reflecting on His addiction to worship. A more gradual shift in tone would enhance the cohesiveness of the piece.
Lack of Emotional Resolution or Climactic Moment
The passage builds up an intriguing arc of divine corruption, but it lacks a clear moment of climax or emotional resolution. If God's descent into power-hungry tyranny is the core theme, then the narrative could benefit from a defining moment where He acknowledges or denies this transformation.
Does He feel guilt?
Does He fully embrace His role as a feared ruler?
Is He still capable of love, or has worship replaced it entirely?
A final paragraph that clarifies God's emotional state—perhaps a reflection on Lucifer’s rebellion, or His own loneliness despite being surrounded by worshippers—could leave a stronger impact.
I assume you do not believe in God or anything like that (which is up to you) but I don't think anyone should make fun of what others believe. If that was not your intention then I'm sorry to say that's how it felt to me and it twisted my gut.
I am a Christian myself and though I suppose it's my own fault for reading this (the first three paragraphs at least), I just wanted to let you know how it may effect some readers.
If this story is how you feel about God then I am truly sorry he seems that way to you.
I don't want to ramble any further but if you would like to hear more or share why you believe what you do I like hearing other people's perspectives. It helps me look at why I believe what I do and either solidify my beliefs or correct them.
Hey there, first off I'm really sorry this hurt you. I definitely didn't intend for it to be harmful or mocking, just a different point of view. I was raised Christian but never really believed in anything religious, so I wrote this from the perspective of an outsider observing the people close to me and I guess sort of flipping the script on everything they always taught me. I'm always interested to hear why people believe and why they don't; how they personally interpret their faith or lack thereof. I wrote this as a possible interpretation of God based off His actions in the Bible, but I think as a non-believer not afraid of offending Him, it came off as insensitive. If I do something like this in the future (like exploring a sensitive topic), I'll definitely try and do it with more tact so the true intention comes through. Again, really sorry for any pain, especially with something I can see is very important to you.
Your reply was honestly a lot nicer than I was expecting. Thank you for being so sensitive and considerate.
I am still exploring my own faith and I totally agree that God can seem the way you portrayed him in the old testament. He is both loving and not afraid to punish sin in ways that seem quite drastic. I often find myself trying to put God in the "he's all loving and my savior" box. But he can also fit into the "strike you down for your sins or don't talk for 400 years" box. In reality you can't really fit God in one box I think, but in the end, he created everything so he kind of makes the rules I guess.
All I know is that I was fortunate enough to feel his love and I hope you do to some day
You are a wonderfully creative person and considerate to boot! May God bless you in your future endevors.
That's nice!