This is Nikayla here dropping in for a review on Review Day!
Another different perspective! Not what I expected. I thought we would've went back to Jamie though I can see that the possibility of that is lowering because in each part there's a new character introduced to follow. Unless the last part is divided up by all three of them but looking at this, I kinda doubt that. What I'm not all that fond of is the fact that we never get enough time to be attached to any of the characters that we're following. Jamie and Garrett don't get enough pages for me to care for them too much, but maybe that's the point? The actual stars of this short story are the two men because they're in each part thus far. I'm intrigued by this technique of having the characters that we're looking through the eyes of be of little importance to the overall story.
At least, that's how I see this so far. They're more spectators of the redheaded man and the blonde man. All of these characters sort of revolve around what the two of them are doing, and I found that to be fascinating. The reader is still in the dark for the most part about what's going on so I do hope that the ending wraps this up with a strong execution because now all the pressure is on the reveal. All of the events previous to the next part are written to build up to this fourth part and create the tension.
Each different perspective so far is unique and I have to say that the second part is the strongest for me in being the most unique. The way that this is written is odd and this is a large risk to take--to put all your money on the last part being well-executed and blowing the reader's mind. I'm hoping that I'm not overwhelmed, though we'll see what happens. The last part in a mystery or the reveal of the mystery is usually the center of the story--the climax. The decider on whether this is a strong short story or not. I hope to be amazed, Mephisto!
If you have any questions, don't be afraid to ask! I hope I helped and have a great day.
Points: 220
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