This is really good, It makes me feel as if i'm listening to a real person speak. I know it can sometimes be difficult to write such a personal narative, yet this feels flawless, Props for that!

Poor thing, had to move to Brookings. The horror!
Lena should be on our website, with all the revising she does.
My one complaint (one, Mell, don't hyperventilate, it's gonna be great, I can tell!) was she goes back and forth from this is who I am and what I like, to guess what super exciting thing happened to me, to these are my interests again. Clump the suspense building stuff together after introducing us to Lena.
Now I go on to chapter one!