Love

There are so many feelings running through this poem. I like how you can see light and darkness on this, how you can write about deep and melancholic feelings, and then, in the end, create high hopes and thoughts about how, in true, it's not really the end.
I think it's very good and I hope I can read more of your writing.

This poems is very good!

Woah! Your poem is very meaningful You have a way with words! I hope you will continue to write more and express yourself

Hi. This is Kman134. i'm here to review.

The problem with love is that there are two types of it. there's the fictitious "love at first sight" that blinds romantics and is merely lust in disguise. it is an evil form of love that makes fools commit idiotic and dangerous feats to win the attention of a person who is incapable of reciprocating one's feelings, or is merely being used for that persons selfish wishes. the other is true love where two compatible souls find each other in a cruel, cold world and find comfort in each other's arms. true love takes a lot of time and a lot of hard work, but in the end it is all worth it.

Your poem expresses true love perfectly and shows the despair one suffers after having their heart broken by someone who is heartless. however, in the darkness where one feels that there is no hope, that person will find the lighting the form of a man or woman who will give them the love and comfort one needs.

i love your poem. it is really good and romantic. i hope to read more form you.

Thanks for sharing this poem. I like the drama that is created by the comma pauses at the end of each line followed by the resumption in the next until almost the end of the poem. It creates interest in what the final answer will be. It also adds strength to the finality of the last line.

Suggestions:

To avoid the “heart” cliche’, you might want to use these instead:

When your [spirit] is broken.

When you wish your [wounds were] sewn.

This was a very good poem. I don't write poetry on a regular basis, but this covers most of the technical elements I've been taught in school. I would suggest looking over your piece for grammatical errors, but other than that, I have no constructive criticism to give. I completely agree with your idea of true love, and I think many readers will enjoy how easy it is to find meaning in your writing.

Hello! I really liked this poem, especially the ending. Good job!

One of the things I noticed was in the second line you wrote "your", when it needed to be "you're".

Suggestion: In the line that says, "For all the mistakes you've made", you should consider saying, "For all the mistakes that you've made". I personally think (in my biased opinion) it has better rhythm, but that's for the author to decide, not me.

suggestion: Punctuation-wise you were pretty consistent throughout. My suggestion to you is that instead of putting a period at the end of every line, why not try for some comma-period alteration?

Instead of, "When your heart is broken. When you're left in the darkness alone. When all emotion has left you. When you wish your heart could be sewn."

Try: "When your heart is broken, when you're left in the darkness alone. When all emotion has left you, when you wish your heart could be sewn."

I think adding commas at the end of some lines will help flow and readability.

Overall, I really liked this poem. I enjoyed the message of the poem and I really liked the emotions you portrayed throughout. My favorite lines were the last two. It had a definite feel. Like you could say this poem out loud, and drop the mic after the last two lines. I'm deviating from the principal topic: I really enjoyed this poem, please keep writing!

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