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Again! I can't exaggerate this enough. Every piece of yours sounds gorgeous inside and out, as if it breathes on its own.
I've never been so impressed with a writer on here, and I've never looked up to anyone's writing like I do to yours. I love your writing, it has this . . . this "mark" on it. Everything you write has personality and style, and I aspire to write like you do. Very impressive. I'd be so thrilled if I were you :p
you're an amazing writer, from the names of your pieces down to the last period.
KEEP WRITING! You have a God-given gift for the trade and I'm looking forward to the rest of your work c:
~Catnip
Nice! The rythm was amazing , I liked how it kept the rythm without necessarily needing to rhyme. Lovely. I can't really say all that much more about it except I agree with MindBlown that it indeed should have been a little longer. I feel like there was still more left to say, but the last line summed it up nicely
Keep it up!
~Speakerskat
Great poem. I do really love short poems but this one was a little to short for my taste. Maybe it's just me
I still loved it. And it has great potential and with a little revision it could be really great 
. I hope I se more from you 
..........~MindBlown
well let me start off by saying that i enjoy poetry espeacially short poems because they get down to the point. but i feel as though could have been a bit longer. i felt like you kept me hanging. like theres no ending to the emotion you put into your work. i want to be able to feel what you feel, you get me? im not an expert poet but i do know a little about poetry. and second i agree with kaylyn, i felt like two diffrent moods were being put into these two stanzas, which is fine but you need at least something to connect the two. like an oreo cookie. your not just going to eat the two chocolate cookies you want the white vanilla center that holds the cookie together.
i enjoyed this poem it was a great start. but dont stop the thought process, keep it flowing.
I'm still trying to understand the deeper meaning of poetry. I have a friend who loves poetry but when she shows it to me I don't understand. Then she explains it to me and I see the deeper meaning and how beautiful it really is. Or sometimes how it shows deep personal encounters. Or you just express your feelings. Could you please leave a short description for me?
It's not really a definitive type of thing...
When you're a kid you don't really question why the world exists, this tree falls in a forest thing, you just play in it as it is without trying to use it or change it. As an adult we tend to get too caught up in philosophizing the world, to find peace of any measure we have to stop worrying about how it came to be and just relax and let it be
First let me say that while short poems can be great, I think that you could add more with this, and that it is wide open for additions. Just a few things:
I feel that there are two totally different moods on these two very different stanzas. This is possibly why I feel there should be a little more to connect it. Not only are the two stanzas completely different on moods, but in structure as well.
I can connect with the entire playing in the woods as kids though, as this is one of my favorite pastimes with my little brothers. We still talk about our memories from this place.
The grammar is good, I didn't spot any mispellings. Just keep working with this. Good luck and keep writing.
~Kay
When you're a kid you don't really question why the world exists, this tree falls in a forest thing, you just play in it as it is without trying to use it or change it. As an adult we tend to get too caught up in philosophizing the world, to find peace of any measure we have to stop worrying about how it came to be and just relax and let it be
That's the mood I was trying to capture in the poem at least.