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Chapter Three - Unnamed LMS VII Novel

by looseleaf

Published September 9, 2026

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A/N: Thank you for reading to Chapter 3! This one was a little difficult as I had to research everything having to do with 1930s farming. We actually talked about that exact topic in my history lecture about an hour ago, so we'll see what many edits I'll have to make in the future. As always, any and all comments are welcomed! I post weekly updates of this story here.

It had become Eduard’s habit to stop for gas on the corner of Cody and Hawk before making the final leg of his journey to the farm. He recognized the attendant that was serving him, but whether it was from his last visit or his childhood, he could not remember. The man blew bubbles with his gum as he filled the truck’s tank and told Eduard the latest of his life’s happenings.

“My dog—a blue heeler—just had puppies. Six of ‘em,” he said. He would recount the same story to a dozen more customers that afternoon. “You in the market for a blue heeler puppy?”

“Is the father also a blue heeler?”

The attendant blew another bubble. It popped before it reached the size of a walnut.

“He can be—” he said before choking on his next word. He had something of a stutter. “—whatever you want him to be. We don’t know who the daddy is.”

Eduard shrugged as he counted the coins. He was leaning against the side of the Chevy. Sweat condensed on his brow as the sun centered itself in the cloudless sky. His shirtsleeves were practically rolled up to his armpits, and his suspenders hung loose at his sides.

“I’ll be coming back around tomorrow evening. Maybe I’ll want one by then.”

“They’re four dollars a pop. Three for the girls.”

“How much for the gas?”

“A dollar sixty-eight.”

Eduard tsked as he pulled an extra dime out of his pants. He dropped them in the attendant’s outstretched palm. The blond worker threw the change into his shirt pocket without counting them.

“Don’t forget,” he said as Eduard walked around to the driver’s side. “Gas rationing will find itself here by the end of the year.”

“I know.”

“You said you’ve come here from Omaha?”

“Mm-hm.”

“Well, I’d count on cutting back on the hundred-mile drives in the near future. Yankees out East have already made them impossible.”

“Thank you for the warning.”

Less than two miles remained on his drive, but it was the longest stretch of the day. The truck crawled down Aksamit Street, past the ten shotgun and Victorian homes that made up the town’s only residential block. Instead of a farm, the homes’ owners spent their free time manicuring their lawns so that they looked straight out of a magazine, despite the adverse climate. Eduard’s foot hovered over the gas as he passed the sole house on the west side of the street, where one of the Wasson’s children lived.

He turned right onto County Road K, but everyone just called the stretch of it in town “Main Street.” For two blocks, two-story brick buildings lined the sidewalk, creating the town’s social scene. A third of the buildings were empty, but businesses and restaurants still filled the first floors of most structures. There was the drugstore where Eduard had worked as a soda jerk for three winters; he had had to walk almost a mile there and back every day. The general store sat at the intersection and was catty-corner to the movie theater that had moved in last year. It had one screen and a capacity of forty people, and attracted everyone in the town at least once a week.

Old man Klement’s bookstore, which sold books along with any other miscellaneous object he wanted to sell, was the last establishment on the main drag. Every time he came home, Eduard stopped there to drop off new releases that he had just finished reading, and this Saturday was no different. Mr. Klement insisted on giving Eduard ten cents for every used book, which Eduard would just give to Mary to spend back at the store.

“These really are my best sellers,” Mr. Klement told the younger man as he flipped through his copy of The Moving Finger. “You bring me these copies a month before I can get them on the shelves myself.”

“Well, I’m sorry I only have three this time.”

“Eddie, you never have to apologize to me,” the older man replied. He patted the pile of books before readjusting his spectacles. “As long as your sister keeps coming here and buying up my books, you and me are in the clear.”

A random assortment of coins and candy found themselves back in Eduard’s possession. He walked out of the buildings and into his truck. People, most of them figures of Eduard’s childhood, milled about the storefronts as the weekend settled in. He observed how their features had changed as the truck rolled past. The wrinkled farmers were a little more grey, and their children a little taller.

Almost a mile of road stretched between the edge of town and Schovajsa Road. A sea of yellow and jade cornstalks surrounded the pavement, towering over the squat vehicle and its occupant. A few rogue laborers milled about and checked the plants. The distant end of the road melded into the empty blue horizon. 

Eduard glanced at the passenger seat. The letter that he had received the day before stared back at him. Its return address had been torn away, but he knew where to find its sender. He steadied one hand on the wheel as he stuffed the letter into his overnight bag. 

The Wasson’s catalogue home broke the homogenous scene, surrounded by its mowed yard and ancient trees. Speckles of algae covered its north side and darkness consumed the windows. Mr. Wasson was tinkering under the hood of his car through the open garage door. Eduard honked his horn twice as a hello.

Eduard sped as he neared the Dostals’ house. Its gabled roof and brick walls rose over the Earth and filled his windshield. Wind rustled through the fields and combined with the cattles’ chatter, filling Eduard’s ears with the song of his youth. The livestock walked along the fence to his left as they followed the truck with their beady eyes. A phantom pain shot up his right arm. He gripped the steering wheel until his knuckles turned white.

A child emerged from behind the house as Eduard turned into the driveway. Even at eight, little Hedvika resembled her namesake as closely as a deathmask. Like her mother, her skin appeared tight over her frame, and her dress hung loose over her gangly figure. As she bounded towards her brother, her auburn curls bounced around her face.

“Eddie, Eddie, Eddie!” She exclaimed with a speed that would drive most people mad.

Eduard jumped out of the car. His little sister ran up to him, embracing his legs. He patted her on the head.

“Eddie! You have anything for me?”

He laughed and returned to the car. He opened his weekender. Next to his clothes, a small paper bag protected a mixture of lemon drops and lollipops from the morning’s journey. He poured some of its contents in his sister’s hands. She squealed and began unwrapping her favorite: a tootsie pop.

Eduard followed Hedvika through the front door of their home. The interior had changed little in six years, let alone six months. Their carpet had been replaced, but its replacement differed only in age. His mother’s vase still sat on the table in the entry and was filled with a fresh bundle of goldenrods. Next to it was the telephone that Mr. Dostal bought a week to the day after his wife died.

“Eddie?” A woman’s singsong voice rang from the kitchen.

“Mary?” Eduard replied in the same tone.

His middle sister appeared behind the stairwell, wiping her calloused hands on a stained apron. A piece of cloth wrangled her hair into a pile on the top of her head, making her equal in height to her brother. Eyebags blemished her otherwise youthful face. Her dress matched the green hue of the cloth on her head, and she wore no pantyhose under it.

“It’s good to see you,” she said, taking his overnight bag. She lifted it up and grimaced. “How long are you staying?”

“Until tomorrow afternoon.”

Her shoulders sank.

“Did you get Mrs. Kaplan’s letter?”

“It’s in that bag you’re carrying.”

“I really need to talk to you—”

“Later. Where’s father?”

“Father can wait. I want—”

“Mary, please. I’m only here for so long.”

Mary huffed. She turned on her heels.

“He says he wants you outside as soon as possible,” she called down as she climbed the stairs to Eduard’s room. “Might as well get some work in on your stop here.”

Eduard looked to Hedvika, who had not moved from her position against the doorframe. Her navy dress looked spotless, despite having been worn by Mary nearly a decade prior. She chomped on the tootsie pop.

“Can I have another?” She asked, the desecrated fragments of the first sucker still in her mouth.

He threw a furtive glance up the stairs before nodding with his index finger held over his mouth. Hedvika mimicked him. She began unwrapping her newest sweet as she disappeared down the living room.

The hallway to the kitchen was plastered with pictures of close and distant family members. Mr. Dostal’s family was scarcely represented, growing up too poor to take many decent photographs. Mrs. Dostal’s side hoarded the majority of the space. The largest photograph featured the two of them on their wedding day, standing in front of Mr. Dostal’s childhood home in Saunders County. That was 1921. Next to it was a snapshot from two years later: Mrs. Dostal, holding Eduard’s toddler hand in among the cornstalks. Eduard shuddered as he passed the photographs of his mother, her face younger than his behind the glass panes.

Eduard looked out the window above the kitchen sink to the backyard. The empty clothesline swayed in the breeze to the behest of the birds trying to perch on it. His father stood beyond it, crouched beside a wheel on their wagon. 

Jak se máš, tati?” Eduard asked as he emerged from the screen door.

His father stood with a drawn-out groan. Long ago, Eduard had decided that the man in his parents’ wedding portraits and the man who raised him were two distinct people. One was perpetually anticipating a future of a happy family and years of plentiful harvest; the other was forever trapped, begging time to go in reverse.

“Fine, Eduard, just fine.”

Mr. Dostal crossed the yard to his son. At forty-four, his back stooped below its full height so that he was eye level with Eduard’s nostrils. He shook his son’s hand, then wiped the grease off of his onto his starched jeans.

“How have Mary and Hedvika been?”

“Fine, too.”

The two Dostal men examined each other over a barrier of foot-tall grass and animal droppings. Sweat stained Mr. Dostal’s linen shirt and mixed with the dirt already speckled across his face. A blue and yellow patch covered a hole on his thin sleeve, sewn in place by his wife nearly a decade prior.

“I was thinking—”

“I need you to—”

They stared at each other until Eduard diverted his gaze, and Mr. Dostal was free to speak.

“I need you to help me with this,” he said, motioning to the scene behind him. “Wagon, then the pegs. See the horses before dinner.”

Eduard furrowed his brow.

“Did you not feed them this morning?” He asked.

“What do you think I am? Dense?” Mr. Dostal waved the question away. “Of course I fed them, and milked the cows with Mary’s help. It’s your turn to help with mucking the barn.”

The older man returned to his position in front of the twelve-spoke wheel without another word. He tended to their ancient box wagon as if it was his oldest son. By the end of autumn, it would haul hundreds of pounds of corn out of their fields and into the world.

A breeze whisked through the farm, filling the air with the sound of rustling leaves and corn stalks. Everything was the same bronzed yellow, from the soil beneath their feet to the color of Mr. Dostal’s tanned skin. Even the wagon, maligned with all sorts of issues, had a distinctive jaundiced tint to it.

Eduard turned his back on his father and traced his steps back to the entryway. The house was silent, except for the intermittent creak of a floorboard. He peered out of the front window to the cows across the road. Hedvika clung to the wooden fence, her feet resting on the bottom stringer. Old Shirley, spared from the slaughterhouse thanks to her nomenclator, was licking the child’s face.

Eduard climbed the stairs two at a time. Hedvika’s three dolls lay strewn across the landing around a cast iron kettle. He hopped over the abandoned tea party and into his room.

It was there that Eduard had left his collections and memorabilia—any true testament to the farm life he led. Advertisements, clipped from national magazines and newspapers, covered the peeling wallpaper, enticing Eduard with the most alluring cars and movies of the thirties. Fred Astaire’s face hovered above his bedside, while Ginger Rogers had been long since stolen and repositioned on the walls of Mary’s bedroom. Eduard took a rock from the collection scattered across his dresser and, tossing it over in his hand, dug through the drawers for his jeans.

Ten minutes and a glass of water later, Eduard squatted alongside his father, readying the wagon for the harvest. He found his brain void of any thoughts as they worked in tandem. Mr. Dostal jacked the wagon up, while his son removed each nut and wheel. He drove a sledgehammer into the naves, removing the boxings for his father to fit into the replacement wheels. A lifetime of experience guided his arms and eyes as he labored. He blinked away images of slaughtered cattle with each swing.

Once Mr. Dostal was satisfied with the state of his beloved wagon, Eduard ventured north along Schovajsa Road with the discarded wheels, two at a time. He walked in the ditch in between the road and the cornstalks, ducking to hide his oversized body from the sweltering sun. The Wassons and Dostals shared a barn at their property line, which housed their cattle and communal horses. Over the years, the arrangement had saved them a small fortune, despite the makeshift stable being little more than grey planks and rusted nails.

Eduard dropped the last two wheels on the ground inside the barn. He fell against the wall, causing the family’s tools to rattle above him. A horse stirred and stomped its hooves.

“Eddie?” Mrs. Wasson’s voice rang out from one of the stalls. She appeared in his view just as he registered the sound. He corrected his posture. Despite the sweat and crud covering his shirt, she enveloped him in a hug.

“How are you ma’am?”

“Never better, Eddie.” The almost seventy-year-old woman stepped back with her hands on her hips. “You get more handsome every time you come back from that city, you know that? Taller, too.”

“It must be something in the air.”

“Or the water,” she chuckled. “I thought that was your truck that passed by my house earlier.”

“I’m sorry, Mrs. Wasson. I should’ve stopped by.”

“Do not worry about it, sweetheart. Can you stay a minute and tell me about how the last two weeks have treated you?”

Eduard looked over his shoulder at nothing in particular.

“I told dad that I would help him fix the straps on some of our husking pegs,” he explained. “He’s convinced that we can use some rubber from an old tire to replace some of them.”

“Your father is a smart man—I would not doubt him,” Mrs. Wasson replied. She paused for a second, deep in thought, before continuing. “Is there something you can do here? Surely, the pegs can wait until before dinner.”

“He asked me to muck the stalls.”

“Perfect.”

Eduard picked up a pitchfork as Mrs. Wasson led the first of the four horses out of its stall. He began sifting and discarding the manure as he described his Omahan escapades to her. He told her about the auditorium and dance halls, about playing softball after work, about Stan and Francis and Ann. He described the Meyerovichs, and the stout man in the photograph that beautiful Galina had agreed to marry. As he finished cleaning out the second stall, he drifted into the topic of his work: the cold and damp slaughterhouse, the long hours and short lunch break, and the feeling of the cattles’ eyes watching him as his mallet came down on their heads.

“How many cows do you”—she mulled over her next words—”get through in a day?”

Eduard shrugged as he led the horse back into its stall. It was almost as tall as him.

“That depends. Usually it’s around two hundred, but once in a while I reach three hundred,” he explained. Then, for no particular reason, he chuckled. “Stan says I’m the most efficient knocker he’s ever worked with. And he’s been at Armour longer than I’ve been alive.”

Mrs. Wasson nodded her head. She had sat on a bench along the wall and was crossing her legs.

“Is there anything you can think of when you are working? Anything to distract yourself from it?”

“Well, I like to think it improves my baseball swing, swinging that hammer all day.”

Eduard turned to the woman with a grin plastered across his face, only to discover her frowning and staring at her hands in her lap.

“I’m sorry, Mrs. Wasson. I didn’t mean to be cruel.”

“I know.”

“I pray sometimes. Then I think of the farm and my sisters, and how they must be doing.”

“That’s nice.”

“I try not to think of our cattle.”

She nodded along.

“I suppose when I go back, I’ll be thinking about this Ann girl. Mrs. Wasson, I don’t know how else to describe her except for ‘gorgeous.’ She’s the most beautiful woman I’ve ever seen.”

“How does she feel about you?”

“I don’t know,” he said. He crossed his arms on the top of the pitchfork and rested his head. “I just met her yesterday, though I suppose I had seen her at Church before. And Stan always talks about how proud he is of her and her brain.”

“I can’t imagine that any girl could stomach the idea of a slaughterhouse,” Mrs. Wasson stated.

Eduard avoided her gaze. Her youngest child had long since grown up, but she had continued perfecting her mothering skills with the children next door. 

“Just because I grew up raising animals doesn’t mean slaughtering them isn’t a respectable job,” he mumbled.

“I know.”

“I’m lucky I got a job. One that isn’t demeaning.” 

“I know, dear.”

He sighed and moved to the final stall. He did not bother to move the horse, instead trying to muck around its hooves. The animal spun around to watch his every movement.

“Did you say that this Francis boy is a dentist?”

“Former baseball phenom, too.”

“Well, why don’t you do that?”

“Play professional baseball? Mrs. Wasson, I think you may be going senile.”

She threw a rag at him and shook her head. “No, Eddie. I mean go to college.”

With a thud, the pitchfork fell to the ground. Plumes of grime and hay floated into the air. Eduard shifted his weight and stared at the aging woman who had raised him.

“Don’t get me started, Mrs. Wasson.”

“I know plenty of people who took night classes to finish high school. And why stop there?”

She walked up to him with her arm extended, but he backed away, his foot sinking into the pile of filth behind him.

“You’re the one who put Mary up to this,” he bickered.

“I know her teacher sent you a letter, Eddie. And I know that you got it before coming back here today.”

“I don’t want to hear this,” he muttered.

“You’re smart, Eddie, even if you didn’t have formal schooling,” she said softly as he picked his tool out of the mud. “But Mary is brilliant, and she could have enough of an education to do something meaningful with it. Did you know she has been attending classes in Wilber?”

“I heard.” He pictured the new high school building in his mind, with its large bright windows and corridors filled with lockers. In comparison to the one-room schoolhouse he had frequented up until the age of eleven, Wilber High was Princeton.

“You cannot stand here and let her talents waste away on this farm, Eddie.”

Eduard spun on his heels, forgetting the mess that still covered the ground around him. His face burned as a deep pink spread across his cheeks.

“Maybe that’s just our lot in life, Mrs. Wasson,” he said. 

He took a step forward, intending to push past her through the open barn doors and into the rows of corn beyond them. But the horse neighed, and Eduard retreated to sift new hay onto the floor again. Mrs. Wasson watched him work in a trained silence, her arms crossed across her chest.

When Eduard had finished his task, he placed the pitchfork against the wall where he had found it. He pet the horse on the nose and wiped his hands on his jeans. Mrs. Wasson maintained her pose alongside the tools as the young man avoided her piercing gaze. He walked to the door with an apologetic smile that more closely resembled a grimace. The sun had disappeared behind the structure, casting Eduard and the surrounding grass in a heavy shade. A field mouse scurried into the forest of stalks at the thunder of his feet.

Five feet from the building, he turned around. Mrs. Wasson was diminutive compared to the dilapidated barn, which stretched beyond his vision into the heavens. 

“Sorry, ma’am,” he said, his voice cracking.

“I understand, Eddie.”

He lifted his arms in surrender and shook his head, his mouth agape.

“I just don’t want to be the one to stay here.”

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Tikaya wrote a review Review · 2h ago

Good morning leaf!
Here before someone else steals the second review =D

Hm shouldn’t it be the attendant “who” was serving him?

I like how you included the prices (I would have chickened out. In fact, I DID chicken out on naming prices in WoS…); it gives a nice point of references when we can compare the price of a dog to the price of a refueling.

I also like that Ed’s warned that he might not make another trip home during the war. That was also nice to see, you working that into the story so smoothly (that said, he wouldn’t have that problem if the US of A had a functioning public transport system -.-)

Less than two miles remained on his drive, but it was the longest stretch of the day.
Ok mb I am dumb or it’s the language barrier but I don’t understand this?

Mr. Klement insisted on giving Eduard ten cents for every used book, which Eduard would just give to Mary to spend back at the store.
Awww <3 This is how the economy should work!

Learnt the word “meld” to use like you did here today and it is beautiful :3

Its return address had been torn away, but he knew where to find its sender.
I like how ominous that sounds.

A phantom pain shot up his right arm. He gripped the steering wheel until his knuckles turned white.
Oh what a nice sequence!

Next to it was the telephone that Mr. Dostal bought a week to the day after his wife died.
Oh how bittersweet ☹

A piece of cloth wrangled her hair into a pile on the top of her head, making her equal in height to her brother
Love this description <3

“Can I have another?” she asked,
Dialogue Formatting.

her face younger than his behind the glass panes.
Ohhhh that too is such a good line!

Hedvika’s three dolls lay strewn across the landing around a cast iron kettle. He hopped over the abandoned tea party and into his room.
I like this detail :3

I can’t believe you tricked me into learning how to replace a wheel for 8 minutes D=

“How many cows do you”—she mulled over her next words—”get through in a day?”
I really like how you phrased the break here. Must remember to use “to mull” more often in my story too :3

Ahhh so their JOB is called “knocker” this is why you called them knockers last chapter!

“How does she feel about you?”
She thinks you’re boring, sweetheart xp

The animal spun around to watch his every movement.
I like all these little details you include.

“I just don’t want to be the one to stay here.”
Ah so he hopes Mary (or rather Mary’s future husband) takes over the farm so he doesn’t have to come back here?

It has been 3 chapters now and it’s all very nicely written and well-researched (probably?) but I’m having trouble figuring out where you want to go with this story.
You have opened several plot threads etc but none of them feel like the … main plot? Like, there doesn’t seem to be a bigger picture or anything we are working toward.
Edward is adrift, yes, so the story reflects that but as readers we would like something more to attach us to the story?

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PavlovsGod wrote a review Review · 8h ago

Hi there! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

I sure hope I get this right, I've never used the system before and I want to give your work the proper review it deserves ^.^

Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
There's not much here to critique, I think you've reached a level where I'm only looking at very minor things that interrupt the natural flow of your writing (which is quite good already). I have not read the first two chapters, and for that I apologize. I certainly will be after this! Great job! ^.^

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past the ten shotgun and Victorian homes that made up the town’s only residential block


I had to read this twice. I'm not sure if that means you should change it, but I always take note of lines in my own writing that I have to read twice.

he had had to walk almost a mile there and back every day


I'm sure everyone has opinions on had had, but i think this would read smoother as "he'd had"

twelve-spoke wheel


Had to read this twice, though idk enough about the jargon to know if there's a better word for this

He shook his son’s hand, then wiped the grease off of his onto his starched jeans.

At first I thought this was a typo, now I see you're intentionally using the possessive. I'll have to defer to my "had to read it twice" rule, I suppose.

Old Shirley, spared from the slaughterhouse thanks to her nomenclator, was licking the child’s face.


This could very well be nothing, but I notice a bit of, let's say academic distance, between the voice in the writing, and the down-home country life that's being explained. When you say "nomenclature" where a rural person would just say "name," it gives a feel almost like the writer is an outsider examining these people. I don't know if this is intentional or not, so I can't say for sure this belongs in this section.

Fred Astaire’s face hovered above his bedside, while Ginger Rogers had been long since stolen and repositioned on the walls of Mary’s bedroom.

This is great for showing the time period, and tying him to his own past, but you can even add specific memories of how these people affected him. "Got dumped and listened to this song over and over," or something like that. The more specific and weird, the more it feels like a real memory.
Once Mr. Dostal was satisfied with the state of his beloved wagon, Eduard ventured north along Schovajsa Road with the discarded wheels, two at a time.

Were they heavy? What was his carrying technique? I imagine there's a right way to do it so you don't hurt yourself. Laborers are thinking about these things.
To be honest this might not be a critique as much as I am just hungry for laborer details ^.^

And finally, I don't think we ever get to see what Mrs. Wasson is wearing, and I think that would make for some good details that would serve to ground us more in that point in history.

Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece
I LOVE LOVE LOVE the research into history and actual practices. I truly believe everyone should do this as much as they are able!

I had a blue heeler as a kid! Why the heck is this speaking to me specifically?

I'm such a history nerd, it's brilliant to have them complain about the price of gas at a dollar and some change.

The description of the middle sister perfectly encapsulates her apearance and personality. Like, wiping her calloused hands on her apron, it's a good use of literary space.

Mr. Dostal jacked the wagon up, while his son removed each nut and wheel. He drove a sledgehammer into the naves, removing the boxings for his father to fit into the replacement wheels. A lifetime of experience guided his arms and eyes as he labored.

LOVE LOVE LOVE any depiction of a historical laborer, especially the details. For most of human history, 99% of humans have been laborers, yet 99% of our stories are about the upper class. And the fact that you mention the skill and ease is important. Sure, it's interesting that a swordsman has spent 10,000 hours with the blade, but so has your average chef.

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In closing, wow, just wow, I really like what you're doing here. I'm going to have to go check out the previous chapters. I love this sort of high definition historical slice of life. It's really hard to pull off, it reminds me of John Updike, bravo!

I'm sorry I can't speak more broadly on the pacing of the story because I jumped in here, but I'm happy to come back after getting caught up on the previous chapters.

If you want to get really nerdy with the research and details, I certainly wouldn't mind ^.^


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looseleaf replied · 6h ago

Thank you so much for the review! I really appreciate it. I'll definitely be sure to check out those sentences---I think I wrote most of them after 10pm haha. But your rule of thumb with having to read them twice is a really great guideline!



When a body moves, it's the most revealing thing. Dance for me a minute, and I'll tell you who you are.
— Mikhail Baryshnikov