Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.
Hi there!Okay, I won’t lie. When I read someone will be having a good old fashion burning at the stake in terms of execution, my mind went to, yep, you guessed it; the Witch Trials. The imagery here shines through here. It is said the woman perhaps committed adultery (?) which in the times of Puritan rule would mostly have warranted death so if that’s the case, the plot thickens! More so when we see she married two men at once! For shame… Tsk, tsk. And then we read she abandons children! Like, what kind of demon mother/wife is this?! Obviously, not a very good person, that’s for sure. There is a lot going on here in the poem. Right now, my little needy brain is going a mile a minute. Lol! I enjoyed reading your poem very much. Clearly, you have a knack and talent for composing poetry, a skill I do not possess.
Like, what kind of demon mother/wife is this?! Obviously, not a very good person, that%u2019s for sure.
Hi alliyah! I might stop back with a full-fledged review for you later, since I have a lot to say about this poem - but for now I'm just going to drop by with a quick comment in the spirit of the Comment Weekend Bonanza! I see a bit of feminist critique of the standards people hold mothers to (vs fathers) in this poem, and I find that super interesting. And of course anyone who is a parent does have a lot of responsibility for their children's wellbeing, but I think this poem does a great job of exploring a lot of different perspectives and points - and the double standards there are between a mother's responsibility for her children and a father's. I thought the use of parenthesis in the last stanza:
and you know i have in secret wondered (in wild dreams)if we are the ones who are somehow in the wrong
One thing I'm just curious about is whether the dark shadowy shape in the background is meant to represent something specific, or if it's just a shadow in the paper.
Who was the Great-Grandmother, exactly? A wild woman or a woman who followed her dreams? That is left for us, the reader, to decide. This poem was deliciously dark and beautiful-perfect for the Halloween mood. The magic and mystery behind it, the secrets within, all give off a vibe I’m here for. I picture reading this in the shadow of night, with a murder of crows cawing in the background. I wish you a delightfully magical day/night.
Who was the Great-Grandmother, exactly? A wild woman or a woman who followed her dreams?
Hey there!Right away, can I just say I love the presentation of this poem? As someone who loves combining visual aspects with poetry, the burned paper and bird drawing adds a lot to the poem. The question at the end too, was so beautifully executed and left me with a bit of a "wow" moment; the way you built up to it with the smaller "maybes" beforehand made it even more hard-hitting. The different ways you used fire in this poem was also nicely executed; the contrast between condemning someone to die at the stake versus a phoenix who is reborn from flames was used well to illustrate the great grandmother's wild nature and whether it was truly her, or if it only existed in others' views of her. Really nice work, and good luck with LMS! I'm excited to read all of your poetry that comes out of it!
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