Are you thinking of me?
....I am thinking of you
Do you want me there?
.. i want you here
Do you dream of me
... I can't tell you what I dream of.
Every time i go away I leave you a gift
that way your're thinking of me
Do you smile or laugh at my little gift
or just put in the pile
Maybe you hold it to your chest.
Are you thinking of me?
You hug me when I get back
like you'll never let me go
your eyes sparkle and shine.
and every word... you speak
oh every word you speak
is sweeter than the last.
When you you kiss me?
I know you WERE thinking of me
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Enjoyed reading this. Really like the "Are you thinking of me?" It's a common question that goes through my mind so I could really associate well with that, especially with the "I am thinking of you" That was great
Hello
I enjoyed this,
It is a good piece.
But for some reason,
I didn't feel this.
Very sweet,
It's very short which is very good.
Because some people dont really have much time to read something really long.
Little hints- Try to make something more necessary like rhyme it or something.
Because I didnt really understand it,
But it is very good for reviewing because you have including so many things to review about.
Thank-you for sharing thus.
Hello there
This was a nice little poem. I honestly didn't like how you added the ... I didn't feel it was necessary or correct grammar wise. You have a nice flow with the rhythm I must say. I could also feel your emotions in your words which is a very good thing. Overall I really did like this. I thought it was emotional and sweet. Keep up the good work and keep writing!
-Your reviewer friend
thank you i hope to develop my writing skills on this site
Hey there, my friend!
It's BlimeyLimey217 here to review!
First of all, I really enjoyed this poem! It was well written, and the topic is something that I can easily relate to! Your style of writing is beautiful as well!
Secondly, I thought the rhythm was pretty good! With a little more thought and work, it would be really good. Adding some rhyme may help a bit, but it was really good nonetheless!
Thirdly, your grammar could use a little work. Just adding some commas and periods or semicolons and such would do wonders to the grammar and rhythm!
Lastly, I really did love this! It's been something I've been thinking about for a while and you're a great writer!
Keep up the good work!
I look forward to reading more of your works in the future!
~Your friend, fellow writer, and happy reviewer, MK
thank you, I am quite young but i hope to develop my skills through this site