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This is so lyrical. I can put this into a song with my cello and a couple good friends. Youre pretty good at this poem, but tone down a bit. Keep writing!
That'd be awesome! Thanks for the comment!
Ill see if some of my frineds will do it. I have a good tune in mind
Repetition can be a powerful tool, but you've perhaps used it a little too much for my liking here. It's clear that you're expressing something very important here. This poem seems very lyrical. If you were a musician, I'd recommend trying to put some music to it?
I see what you mean. Unfortunately I don't have the musical talent to express it in a song though. But I do see what you're saying. Thanks for the comment